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HDDreyar
HDDreyarLv56yr
2018-10-13 08:50

Well the start of the story was great, I guess until he put a limiter on the mc and the encounter with danzo, well let's just say that it "killed the mood" of the story. Its not even an overpowered mc as he has a limiter and! HE DOESN'T EVEN FIGHT!!!!!!! The fight scenes last for more or less HALF a chapter. Its quite boring honestly.

Greater Than Gods: Chojusen Akimichi [Complete: I'm On The Job Editting~ This Is What I'm Suppose To Write, Right?]

BrightDawn
4.0
145 Chs

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BrightDawn
BrightDawnAuthor

Well, if it make you feel better — or someone inclined to turn away because of short fight scenes — The better half of Volume 2 is just back to back fights; each getting more ridiculous than the last~

6yr
Mortifer
MortiferLv14

A***, i was about to read this until i learned of the power down/limiter. F* that **** hahaha

BrightDawn:Well, if it make you feel better — or someone inclined to turn away because of short fight scenes — The better half of Volume 2 is just back to back fights; each getting more ridiculous than the last~
5yr
7
Xzeeas_
Xzeeas_Lv4

they get rid of it in like 8 chapters

Mortifer:A***, i was about to read this until i learned of the power down/limiter. F* that **** hahaha
4yr
EpithetEnjoyer
EpithetEnjoyerLv1

they don't

Xzeeas_:they get rid of it in like 8 chapters
3yr
1
Xzeeas_
Xzeeas_Lv4

they do it doesn't matter later on at all

3yr
1
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ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv4

I'm sorry but this isn't Naruto... MC help Kushina and Minato to survive nine tails attack when he wasn't even 1... If you want to make your MC OP at least make him grow, an baby MC OP should not exist. And your system is too ridiculous, it isn't fun to read a story where the MC is a walking cheat like this. And the last thing I have to say is that when I read a Naruto Fanfiction I expect to see power that come from that world not some overly cheated power that could be on random chinese xianxia.

6yr

_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

Chapter 21 was the last chapter I read. This novel had a lot of potential and I was very impressed by all the original ideas, but then author made M.C. too overpowered and he began to get 'scared' of his own power. M.C even bought something from system that restrains his powers. Not to mention the fact that M.C is acting like a typical japanese protagonist - Sissy* and n*aive. I gave up on this novel. And with that, I change my ratings to the minimum.

6yr
anger
angerLv11

Reveal spoiler

6yr
Crow_OF_Judgement
Crow_OF_JudgementLv3

Read till chapter 71. Here is the review. Writing quality: nice Character: cliche mc who would do anything for the person they slightly bond with. Story Development: Ok How I feel about the novel: Not good for me. Mc's that help anyone and everyone that they bond with is very annoying. The main character just acts like the typical Japanese anime main character with just being a little more merciless.

6yr
Reimoss
ReimossLv14

I hope this is good. After novels about Inuzuka and Hyuga, I was expecting something like this. . . . . . I still do not know why I need 140 characters to be able to post this.

6yr
Dumbgum
DumbgumLv4

Stupid fucking limiter my ass. Its a good story until that part. If you dont want your mc too be OP just let him climb his way from bottom to top.

5yr
Sven123
Sven123Lv12

Reveal spoiler

6yr
AldiXanana
AldiXananaLv6

so far so good and the idea of the mc is born as the brother of chouji is pretty interesting i hope the author will release more chapter and can improve his writing style, also please release more chapter in the future and dont make the mc op to fast it will ruin your story later and becareful towards the harem route if u will add it later cause it will be sad if another good potential novel ruin because of the opness and haremm

6yr
Mike_Lu
Mike_LuLv3

The plot is full of holes. The writing is not as bad as other fanfic here but some logic is very pathetic. Not to mention the fact the formatting is horrendous

5yr
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