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ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv46yr
2018-10-09 08:17

I'm sorry but this isn't Naruto... MC help Kushina and Minato to survive nine tails attack when he wasn't even 1... If you want to make your MC OP at least make him grow, an baby MC OP should not exist. And your system is too ridiculous, it isn't fun to read a story where the MC is a walking cheat like this. And the last thing I have to say is that when I read a Naruto Fanfiction I expect to see power that come from that world not some overly cheated power that could be on random chinese xianxia.

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BrightDawn
BrightDawnAuthor

Well, I respect your opinion and I glad that you gave my novel a three star even though you dislike it. But, if may be so bold as to defend my novleroni, I think I'm letting him grow despite his OPness and the system; I mean, it says you've read up to Chapter 22 so you should be aware of how he's changed. P.S. I like your DxD work :)

ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv4

The story itself is well written and have a lot chapters (contrary to mine lol), it's just that I can't enjoy these type of stories but it's just my personal thinking so it isn't really relevant. Anyway good luck man. ** : im glad you enjoyed, sorry for the lack of chapter by the way :)

BrightDawn:Well, I respect your opinion and I glad that you gave my novel a three star even though you dislike it. But, if may be so bold as to defend my novleroni, I think I'm letting him grow despite his OPness and the system; I mean, it says you've read up to Chapter 22 so you should be aware of how he's changed. P.S. I like your DxD work :)
Angelxcx
AngelxcxLv5

On the other hand I really enjoy OP MC and I do not like strugel MC

Pashtun
PashtunLv4

Lol true. MC has an overpowered system from the Gamer, all affinities (and some more) from Naruto and overpowered abilities from Xianxia novels. And guess what? From before he is even one year old!!! Although I still enjoyed reading it.

Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinLv13

the only baby that can save the day is Broly! ... don't mind me, I'm just a lurker.

ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv4

Man, you have to tell me your secret to be as consistent as you ! Your novel has 190+ chapters ! You must use Kage Bunshin don't you ?

Oniichan_Thickskin:the only baby that can save the day is Broly! ... don't mind me, I'm just a lurker.
Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinLv13

I don't, the secret for consistency is time management.

ChrolloDancho:Man, you have to tell me your secret to be as consistent as you ! Your novel has 190+ chapters ! You must use Kage Bunshin don't you ?
ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv4

True

Oniichan_Thickskin:I don't, the secret for consistency is time management.
zaiziua
zaiziuaLv5

AND THIS IS THE COMMENT OF A MAN WHO WRITES A BOOK ABOUT SERIAL RAPIST-MURDERER-THIEF-BRAINLESS DICKHEAD CUNT WHICH AFTER 3 HOURS HAS PASSED 5 STAGES OF CULTIVATION? WHO STOLE IT FROM THE MAN AND MADE HIM WATCH AS HE RAPES HIS WOMEN AND SISTERS.( YOU'RE THE WORST PERSON ON THE PLANET AND YOUR SINS FROM WRITING THAT BOOK COMPARABLE TO HITLER

ChrolloDancho
ChrolloDanchoLv4

It was an illusion didn't you understand ?

zaiziua:AND THIS IS THE COMMENT OF A MAN WHO WRITES A BOOK ABOUT SERIAL RAPIST-MURDERER-THIEF-BRAINLESS DICKHEAD CUNT WHICH AFTER 3 HOURS HAS PASSED 5 STAGES OF CULTIVATION? WHO STOLE IT FROM THE MAN AND MADE HIM WATCH AS HE RAPES HIS WOMEN AND SISTERS.( YOU'RE THE WORST PERSON ON THE PLANET AND YOUR SINS FROM WRITING THAT BOOK COMPARABLE TO HITLER
zaiziua
zaiziuaLv5

the very concept that the main character forced a person to go through such a disgusting( without much on the top reasons)

ChrolloDancho:It was an illusion didn't you understand ?
Nydre
NydreLv14

Dude you make yun chen look like a saint. He raped 2 women in the story and killed 7 million innocent people in his past life by poisoning them. Also did you read the book when he amputated a guys limbs and destroyed his senses and let him live like a vegetable? If hes a saint the devil must be god.

zaiziua:the very concept that the main character forced a person to go through such a disgusting( without much on the top reasons)
NamelessRYDP
NamelessRYDPLv5

There's is no ridiculous on his system idiot.. Try to watch japanese anime or the novel of DEATH MARCH KARA HAJIMARU ISEKAI KYOUSETSU on how OP the MC's system there, And also if you say that a baby MC does not exist try to watch the beezlebub japanese anime on how the MC baby beezlebub make a conctract with mortal fighting with demon and gods alongside with his contractor

NamelessRYDP
NamelessRYDPLv5

And let me tell you that Death March Kara hajimaru isekai kyousetsu and Beezlebub is pretty popular anime and Novel.

NamelessRYDP
NamelessRYDPLv5

You should bring your critics there while they already made to anime and here the novel is still ongoing. πŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘

AncientReader
AncientReaderLv13

I like OP MCs.. with cheat abilities.. i mean, what's the use of reincarnating if its just another earth..

Mavisu
MavisuLv4

aren't you read one just now? YES,, Exactly !! xD

VictoriousFighting
VictoriousFightingLv4

Exp. I my self hate Yun Che

Nydre:Dude you make yun chen look like a saint. He raped 2 women in the story and killed 7 million innocent people in his past life by poisoning them. Also did you read the book when he amputated a guys limbs and destroyed his senses and let him live like a vegetable? If hes a saint the devil must be god.
UMMOSDCGSM
UMMOSDCGSMLv3

It's fanfic if you don't like it then don't read itπŸ˜…βœŒβœŒβœŒ don't get offended

haremphobic
haremphobicLv15

man thats just flat iut boring

Angelxcx:On the other hand I really enjoy OP MC and I do not like strugel MC
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