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EnderPL
EnderPLLv66yr
2018-10-16 05:31

The first and second chapter gave me hope... and that’s it. There is nothing special about this story. It’s just potential being destroyed. The character with great intelligence can not adapt, the whole story is just boring. Still, respect for trying.

Adopted Soldier

lynerparel
4.4
420 Chs

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lynerparel
lynerparelAuthor

Thanks for reading up to the latest chapters, sorry to disappoint you. Still you should have stopped reading once you got to chapter 20 and realized you don't like this type of thing.

6yr
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EnderPL
EnderPLLv6

Did the first ten and then skip to the last 2 hoping for the best. Maybe next story will be to my taste;).

lynerparel:Thanks for reading up to the latest chapters, sorry to disappoint you. Still you should have stopped reading once you got to chapter 20 and realized you don't like this type of thing.
6yr
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Powwder
PowwderLv6

I can see how ******** military people have problems adapting to civilian life. I mean the way you are wired to think is completely different in the military and it takes time to get used to living like us normies. I remember my uncle telling me after he got out of the air force he had problems in his college English classes because they way they write reports were different. he was used to just stating facts as ****** as possible which isn't how normal people speak/write.

6yr
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sixerninerfives
sixerninerfivesLv4

It's more of the taste and experience of the reader sometimes we don't need to read up to 20 chapters to know I won't like this book

lynerparel:Thanks for reading up to the latest chapters, sorry to disappoint you. Still you should have stopped reading once you got to chapter 20 and realized you don't like this type of thing.
5yr
sixerninerfives
sixerninerfivesLv4

It's mostly adapting to the peaceful side of civilian life if they take rehab they would be ok

Powwder:I can see how ******** military people have problems adapting to civilian life. I mean the way you are wired to think is completely different in the military and it takes time to get used to living like us normies. I remember my uncle telling me after he got out of the air force he had problems in his college English classes because they way they write reports were different. he was used to just stating facts as ****** as possible which isn't how normal people speak/write.
5yr
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Kinda story you just wanna snuggle up in bed and read all day long. I didn't use the words literary masterpiece easily, but 200 years into the future this may be the new Romeo & Juliet.

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lynerparel
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Hi author here, this is my entry to the writing prompt for the school life theme. Once again hoping for support and for those who are reading Overwhelming Path don't worry not dropping that.

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PixelKid
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The story is good and its not rush... I especially like how the MC interacts with his Father... at first I thought that this story will be like his other novel, Overpowered MC with no goal xD... but boy I was wrong... I like this novel very much and also the other novel of yours especially his little wife Ellise personality is really interesting xD

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Crow_OF_Judgement
Crow_OF_JudgementLv3

Another one. This is like those korean k dramas where the mc is a martial artist, gets a job and just can't fit in. There was a guy who was writing things about his uncle being in the army and how he had a bad time adapting. Well, this is going to be harsh, but your uncle probably isn't the same level of genius as the mc here. The mc is a genius only when the author wants it. I don't know if I offend someone but I think even if people are in the army they have common sense. I am not in the army but I can tell that it's not always training and people converse with each other too. If you have read some novels like beauty and the bodyguard you can find 60% things that are similar to that novel here. But keep going.

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Scarlettbunny
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Don't stop writing this! Even if the contest is over keep going this is so freaking cute I am dying from nose bleeds! 😀😀😀😀 I need more Alex and his awkwardness!!! Keep up the good work and don't let anyone bring you down.

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F5_Sektleader
F5_SektleaderLv11

Its a nice try to copy the MC of fullmetal panik and the storyline ( even if it is a little bit different). But the story is shallow as if written by EA, and the jockes are as lame as ****ing on youre girlfriend and telling her that it is a sign of love. Its like a kid who trys to play a prank, known by you and it think its funny like hell. Just dont waste youre time, couse no on will give it back to you.

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Huuurtme
HuuurtmeLv4

The plot is extremely predictable and for me is boring in every way. Just reading this made me wanna puke, the characters are no joke retarded and overall this **** is hella cliche

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J_Enyl
J_EnylLv6

Reveal spoiler

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ilsunny
ilsunnyLv6

It's so lame that it becomes funny with all the cold jokes. Typical orphan op mc acting like an idiot trying to act normal but always have insane choices like shooting the policemen because they prevent him going home.

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