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harrowing
harrowingLv116yr
2019-02-05 01:50

Very slow and the synopsis says he has a super computer in his brain, but in the first 17 chapters hasn't been introduced. So far I find the story dull and the mc is incredibly boring.

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NamelessDandelion
NamelessDandelionLv7

Right? I expected something different, but this is a bad start. It's very slow and I feel that I've been cheated. Where's the magic? Where's that quantum computer? I'm kinda disappointed *sigh* Seems that we have to wait

Milo6824
Milo6824Lv5

its not dull and it will show up soon it probably just needs magick to power itself

harrowing
harrowingLv11

I hope the pace quickens a bit and the mc gets a little more charisma.

Milo6824:its not dull and it will show up soon it probably just needs magick to power itself
SilentMild
SilentMildLv6

webnovel.com/book/12961364405159105/The-Legendary-Demon-Hunter Hi harrowing, hoping to catch your attention. Pls try checking out my work-in-progress novel - THE LEGENDARY DEMON HUNTER. Currently, it has 8 chapters , pls be the first one to comment and share your suggestions for improvements. Lovelots and happy hunting! ==Respect to the translator/author of this novel, pls forgive me for using this chapter to promote my work, if you find it inappropriate pls call me out and i'll delete it asap.In the same way, do not hesitate to promote your work in the comment's section of my work- xoxo==

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Mystic_Main
Mystic_MainLv4

Another really crappily written novel about magic. I'm very pissed, so if this review comes off as ranty, I apologize. First I'd like to point out that this novel is basically a carbon copy of Throne of Magical Arcana. If you read both of them back to back for 20 chapters, you'll be sold about this point. Both live in a world of magic, both worlds of magic have a religious background setting. Both religious background settings are hostile to any magic besides their own. In this way, Throne of Magical Arcana is head and shoulders above this paultry copycat. The only thing that separates these two novels, and I suspect the only reason there hasn't been a lawsuit filed against this plagiarizing piece of crap author is the fact that this story has no musical elements, which in Throne of Magical Arcana, is the major selling point for the first arc. Beyond that, the writing in itself is subpar in its execution, the synopsis mentions a "microchip" that allows the MC to use magic more easily than any other spell caster in the story. This isn't exactly new content and it certainly doesn't break any tropes. The problem with this is the fact that for the first twenty chapters this thing is completely absent. There's no mention of it, in fact, there's no mention of anything having to do with the previous world the MC lived in. Not a single sentence was used to describe anything but the most basic of basic tropes of how the MC died. There's no "want to go back" there's no "I miss my family" there's nothing in this story to show that the MC even came from another world besides the very most basic of basic analogies that the MC sometimes uses to describe things in his mind to us the reader. And even this is very lacking, it's so pathetic that my assessment of it is that the author found it horrendously difficult to come up with a plot that didn't make these analogies. It's not surprising to me really, he copied Throne of Magical Arcana's plot, so he clearly lacks imagination. It doesn't surprise me in the least that he couldn't come up with a nicer way to describe things in his story besides using analogies that fit our world. Getting back on topic, the "microchip" is completely absent for twenty whole chapters and when it finally does show up, it shows up in such a ridiculously plot armory way that I don't even know what to do with it. There's no clever execution, there's nothing to hide it. It's literally "Oh, this is how I'm supposed to do magic, oh damn that's really hard!" "I really wish I had !@$@%!" *Poof* "!@$@% Has been acquired.". LITERALLY. THAT IS LITERALLY WHAT HAPPENS. YOU CAN GO LOOK AT IT YOURSELF! Don't even get me started about more nonsense that happens in this novel. One thing I hate the most about novels is how they sometimes forget their own past plot. Like how something at the start of a story is really important but later on you stop and realize that the major plot point that the entire novel is built around isn't even being mentioned anymore. The mc makes choice to practice fire magic. "Ok." The mc decides to practice fire magic inside his house. "eh" The mc makes huge fire ball of death 3 times more powerful than all the other fireballs he released so far. Super-Fireball explodes shaking his entire basement and leaves a massive meter wide crater on the ground. 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Neveryoumindme
NeveryoumindmeLv5

Reading this novel is rage inducing, it keeps repeating the same basic facts and words over and over and over and over. The chapter where he learns magic is one of the worst offenders, the word Fireball is repeated so much i can still hear it echo around my skull. There is also the one where every phrase talks about "heavy armored knights", he almost uses those exact three words 20 times in a row. The author also has every single character talk as if every other person nearby is a clueless idiot with a memory span of 30 seconds. "Hello friend, it is me your fat friend. We've know each other for 14 years and i still have to introduce myself to you every time we meet. I also have to clearly explain my family background and the fact that i love visiting brothels. Have you heard about Mark? He's our classmate that clearly hates you. He hates you because you are going to marry Clarissa and he told you many times he loves Clarissa too! How incredibly interesting! Did you notice that today the sky was blue? It was the same yesterday and as far as memory goes the color hasn't changed, isn't it wonderful?". This is not an exact quote but if you read the novel you'll find very similar situations. Explanations about stuff is similarly repeated ad nauseam, for example when his computer thingy is introduced we get and explanation on how it will greatly speed up his learning new spells. Now every time the MC talks about new spells he has found he also reminds us about the computer that is going to help him, again. The author or translator doesn't even bother changing up the wording a little, it's like the explanation has been copy and pasted multiple times in different chapters. At this point i'm not even sure if the author is doing it because he thinks the people reading are unimaginably stupid or he's trying to beef up the word count. The story is nothing to write home about, incredibly generic and borrows a whole bunch of elements from other more "famous" novels in this particular genre. Church clearly bad, he has computer in the new body even though it was injected in his blood in the previous word???, he learns magic from a random bored guy and he becomes ruthless at the flip of a coin. I'm quite surprised he hasn't raped anyone yet due to yin and yang imbalance... Almost forgot, he has the computer in his head doing nothing the whole time instead of already calculating stuff he'll obviously need in the future. He'll wait till the last moment to turn it on and find the best combination for a spell he had for months. Why? Anyway i'm bored, i don't feel like writing about this novel anymore. This story is crap, the translator is crappy, he probably pops the raws in google translate and just changes a few words if he's feeling it. If he's doing more then that it sure doesn't show. Don't waste your time with this, eating handfuls of sawdust would be a more productive and fun way to spend your valuable time.

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