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Prideful_Lion
Prideful_LionLv55yr
2019-03-27 22:34

The main idea is good but the plot development is ****. After reading the chapters you would feel like hitting the MC for his stupidity. I feel frustrated reading this light novel ......................... ........... . ..... ..............................................################################################################################

Supreme Martial System

OmnipotentDad
3.8
264 Chs

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OmnipotentDad
OmnipotentDadAuthor

Hello everyone, I am the author of this novel. I'm a newbie author that just started yesterday about 16hrs ago, I`m expecting this novel to get to atleast 800+ chapters im currently struggling from making another novel as to avoid having my ideas divided, i wish you guys can support this novel of mine as I am still a newb Thanks!

6yr

L1_a
L1_aLv5

Now to vote with my other accounts ................................................................................................................................................................

6yr
VEGEKU
VEGEKULv6

Well, I can say Only this that If there was a lower Point that 1 star i would gave it. I personally decided to Drop this novel. This is a Whole collected things of Extreme Spelling and Grammar Problems and mistakes. Writing Style of truly childish and Full of problems, I think that Author doesn't even give a look at his writing to see that what he himself/herself Wrote. and he/she doesn't even has a Plan for his novel. I 100% sure that the Author is a completely newbie not in the way of writing but also novels. I'm truly sure that the number of the novels that he/she read is less than fingers of a hand. Why ? You can see of the messy Background of story messy cultivation path and it's to the situation that i suspect Author doesn't know even the meaning of Cultivation Technique and Cultivation Skill ? MC with Only one Quest will become OP. Author in your Life do you play any game at all for not knowing the Quest how works? The Only good point of novels is it's fast update rate that this itself has caused serious Damage to the Story line. Friend Aliens in Cultivation world? it's OK because it's your novel but try to do it properly. Well at last the ones that want to see a novel of without direction and purpose Read it it's fun in some places anyway I Dropped It maybe you like this novel .

6yr
FishButterfly
FishButterflyLv4

TAGS ......... -Transmigration -Male MC -Stupid MC -Harem -Echhi -System -Cultivation -Kingdom Building -Aliens (OuterSpace) -Humour -Transport Into Other World -Overpowered MC -Sudden Strength Gain -Unpredictable story -Magic and Swords -Teacher -Family

6yr
CH405Kaiser
CH405KaiserLv6

Slow downonmaking your story development. Also if you’re unsure of writing, you can use grammarly or google drive to help you write. Author needs to decide whether or not his dialogue will contain dialogue quotes or use the actor script dialogue. Even then, author needs to learn how to use dialogue quotes. For the background, as readers we don't need to know everything of the character’s tragic happenings. Limit the background to 1-2 sentences. Don't overly explain why this character does certain actions.

6yr
Murderer
MurdererLv4

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6yr
coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv4

I know that in elementary school. No, not even then. Kindergarten. Yes, in kindergarten, proper capitalization is already taught. [small] for the common nouns and most words [Caps] for the sentence starters and proper nouns, names, etc So, why oh why is this story littered with them? I can't even get past the first chapter. And to note, the first chapter is the one that informs the readers what kind of story they'll be reading. It's the King for first impressions. I even checked some more chaps, and basically author-san, your grammar officially sucks. Or find yourself a good editor. I was browsing through the top ** ranks and randomly clicked you. I would've stayed silent but... You are one of the reasons why most readers here have a bad impression on Original stories.

6yr
Skiadra
SkiadraLv14

I can barely understand what's going on. The author really needs an editor. I like the base concept, but because the English is bad, I can't really enjoy. I stuck with it for a bit, but it became super contrived after a while. Like, even the MC from Strongest System didn't progress this quickly. And none of the characters have any depth to them either. Honestly it feel like a bunch of poorly executed cultivation novel tropes. I can still enjoy that kind of thing on a good day, but the poor English prevents me from even that. I hope this project gets an editor so I can start reading again. I really did like the concept!

6yr
paja
pajaLv14

Well english is not my 1 st language so I will not say a word about writing quality, to be honest after 7 chapters i was thinking that this novel will be at last decent. My bad. Its not even aceptable. Its awfull! After 20 chaps mc is already like one of the strongest in this world. Damn, plot without purpose, illogical to the point when author is even writing what he feels in the middle of the chapter. I can't focus on story when there is idiotic sentence from time to time. Whats for + thats the stability of updates. Im droping this one

6yr
b0ss
b0ssLv5

Not very good at all. But I wish the author would make another novel and fix his mistakes.hdbdndndnfkfkckcjckutjktjtjtjkgkgkggkkggkjffjcmdjdkdndndmdkfmcmfkfkfkfkckkc

6yr
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