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coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv46yr
2018-06-19 11:04

I know that in elementary school. No, not even then. Kindergarten. Yes, in kindergarten, proper capitalization is already taught. [small] for the common nouns and most words [Caps] for the sentence starters and proper nouns, names, etc So, why oh why is this story littered with them? I can't even get past the first chapter. And to note, the first chapter is the one that informs the readers what kind of story they'll be reading. It's the King for first impressions. I even checked some more chaps, and basically author-san, your grammar officially sucks. Or find yourself a good editor. I was browsing through the top ** ranks and randomly clicked you. I would've stayed silent but... You are one of the reasons why most readers here have a bad impression on Original stories.

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OmnipotentDad
OmnipotentDadAuthor

Thanks! You can now find a kinder that can write novels! I hope'd you enjoyed your read, even though you skipped it from 0 to 106!

OmnipotentDad
OmnipotentDadAuthor

I don't know if you are one of the authors that hated my work, but don't worry, I wont be getting a contract, I`ll immediately stop at volume 2

DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

Nooo dont stop pls nooo dont listen to her 😢😢😢

OmnipotentDad:I don't know if you are one of the authors that hated my work, but don't worry, I wont be getting a contract, I`ll immediately stop at volume 2
Skiller
SkillerLv4

damn that was harsh . and yes some novels are bad and some are good but rather than just being totally rude some advice and what to avoid for the author would've been better you know ? "I would've stayed silent but... You are one of the reasons why most readers here have a bad impression on Original stories." wish you did even though i didn't read the novel i don't like people who is being totally rude and act like i didn't want to .

Skiller
SkillerLv4

don't stop it's just some stupid grammar and spelling or what ever they say you could improve or get an editor and more possibility's to fix it but if they are right about the story and how random it is well that a problem you should work on so next time you want to write a novel better write earlier and with a plan in mind . some to fix this problem delete there novel and rewrite it but in looks like you wrote more tha 100 chapters so yeah just improve .

OmnipotentDad:Thanks! You can now find a kinder that can write novels! I hope'd you enjoyed your read, even though you skipped it from 0 to 106!
Skiller
SkillerLv4

really what is the problem a lot of people like the novel i think at least bad grammar and spelling could be improved but tell me is this novel have a bad story? because a novel is a story and a story is a novel so yes hehhe . that what matters really oh and having fun.

Skiller
SkillerLv4

my god this is getting annoying again with the writing fu** it if you don't like it and think its trash stop reading it and after that come here complain about the writing because the author wrote harry potter you know? but seriously just point out his mistakes witch he doesn't know about then give it 1 and half star and go god this is annoying.

OmnipotentDad
OmnipotentDadAuthor

Well... What they call random.... Is my plot... I'm not going with a natural script of any other novels out there... Pfft... So that's why they are being like this... They want to read the same stories all over again but with a different name... Place name, mc name, heroine name, etc names, but i guess they want the same plot as others too... With different name... Like other novels

Skiller:my god this is getting annoying again with the writing fu** it if you don't like it and think its trash stop reading it and after that come here complain about the writing because the author wrote harry potter you know? but seriously just point out his mistakes witch he doesn't know about then give it 1 and half star and go god this is annoying.
coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv4

In my opinion, he deserves the rating I gave. Writing is called writing for a reason. If you support him, give him a 5 star. Why yoou barking at me? It's not like my reason for rating him is not valid.

Skiller:really what is the problem a lot of people like the novel i think at least bad grammar and spelling could be improved but tell me is this novel have a bad story? because a novel is a story and a story is a novel so yes hehhe . that what matters really oh and having fun.
coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv4

And, I only said that his grammar sucks. Not that his story sucks. I told him that he can get himself an editor. That is sound advice.

Skiller:damn that was harsh . and yes some novels are bad and some are good but rather than just being totally rude some advice and what to avoid for the author would've been better you know ? "I would've stayed silent but... You are one of the reasons why most readers here have a bad impression on Original stories." wish you did even though i didn't read the novel i don't like people who is being totally rude and act like i didn't want to .
Skiller
SkillerLv4

yeah just don't be a b**ch alright ?

coffee_is_layfu:And, I only said that his grammar sucks. Not that his story sucks. I told him that he can get himself an editor. That is sound advice.
Skiller
SkillerLv4

i don't bark i'm a reasonable human being unless rude people like you who doesn't know how to rate exist.

coffee_is_layfu:And, I only said that his grammar sucks. Not that his story sucks. I told him that he can get himself an editor. That is sound advice.
coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv4

Just because we have opposite opinions doesn't mean you can call me rude. And I wonder who is calling names now. Keh.

Skiller:i don't bark i'm a reasonable human being unless rude people like you who doesn't know how to rate exist.
Skiller
SkillerLv4

at least i can admit i call names even though its **** xD you on the other hand have different opinions but being rude rather than trying to be a little nice .

coffee_is_layfu:Just because we have opposite opinions doesn't mean you can call me rude. And I wonder who is calling names now. Keh.
Chomper
ChomperLv4

Hey can i join? Well in my honest opinion, author really sucks lol, man that grammar, the sentence structure is all over the place it's like reading a MTL of a alien novel. Harsh or harsher, but it's the truth. Get someone to proofread and edit for it to be readable/understandable (to make sense) premise of the strory kinda good and some originality +1, but yeah the point is it SUCK'S. (FOR NOW ATLEAST)

coffee_is_layfu
coffee_is_layfuLv4

Thank you. I don't understand why some of the author's readers can't get that fact into their heads. It is good that they want to defend the author, but at least, don't be unreasonable as to deny the truth and facts. The grammar is a huge problem. If that is fixed, then I believe the rating and reviews wouldn't be so skewed.

Chomper:Hey can i join? Well in my honest opinion, author really sucks lol, man that grammar, the sentence structure is all over the place it's like reading a MTL of a alien novel. Harsh or harsher, but it's the truth. Get someone to proofread and edit for it to be readable/understandable (to make sense) premise of the strory kinda good and some originality +1, but yeah the point is it SUCK'S. (FOR NOW ATLEAST)
Chomper
ChomperLv4

Criticism is a must for Original novels so that young and upstart writers will improve, they need to be open on critical criticism specially on basics like grammar, spelling, sentence structure prose's etc if even those basics you can't comply how much more on professional editing criticism like storyboard, plots revisions etc, so yeah listen to the readers so you can improve, who knows maybe a professional editor was dishing out advices to you but you hurled insults to them instead., karmas a btch ye know younguns

OmnipotentDad
OmnipotentDadAuthor

Pffft... Wow this is great... Review and Critism, what's the difference? I'll just ask that, and leave it there for some people to read... Oh, and i'm sorry, i'm not really a perfect human, and i barely got 3hrs worth of time to write all my chapters. Author = works for 12 hrs = gets paid by nothing as he writes his story = gets critized by people with have nothing better to do in life = sighs at the sight of it = they can't differ between review and critism. Here's something i wish for people to know. Review is something that can make people understand what the novel is all about, and can also help the author identifies his mistake. Now what is critism? Well it is for ****ty people that lacks aspiration and would like to ruin someone's life,(basing it on this review) someone that wishes for people's dream to crumble. Now, let me ask again, what's the difference between critism and reviews? Hint. Reviews (insight) critism (insult)

SomeRandomDaoist
SomeRandomDaoistLv4

Yes

Daoist_Void
Daoist_VoidLv13

If you have any knowledge whatsoever about the country he's from, you will actually compliment his grammar.

coffee_is_layfu:Thank you. I don't understand why some of the author's readers can't get that fact into their heads. It is good that they want to defend the author, but at least, don't be unreasonable as to deny the truth and facts. The grammar is a huge problem. If that is fixed, then I believe the rating and reviews wouldn't be so skewed.
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