Item: Supreme Martial System
Rating: 1.6
Author: CH405Kaiser

CH405KaiserLv66yr

2018-06-02 12:33

Slow downonmaking your story development. Also if you’re unsure of writing, you can use grammarly or google drive to help you write. Author needs to decide whether or not his dialogue will contain dialogue quotes or use the actor script dialogue. Even then, author needs to learn how to use dialogue quotes. For the background, as readers we don't need to know everything of the character’s tragic happenings. Limit the background to 1-2 sentences. Don't overly explain why this character does certain actions.

Supreme Martial System

OmnipotentDad

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