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2018-07-12 12:32

I’m sorry but this bullsh*t. I’m already being to generous giving this 2Stars. It was a great start with the Tomboy Heroine. But after that none of it feels real. There is no logic in this story. Even if it’s your first story you should know how bad this is! Did you even try in organizing the arcs? Even the worst CNs aren’t this bad!

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Thanks, I`ll take that in mind, as the first day I started it, I was too excited throughout the whole writing which caused me to kept making mistakes, I`m trying to change it one by one. Thank you for having the patience to have read it until chapter 47.

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