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I really like how the author write story and the way she described it is awesome.. However be careful to the whole plot as you have to justify why the heroin is talking to her alter ego because it is quite unusual for a person or even a friend of the heroin to know that. The readers might feel uncomfortable and judge the character of the heroin.. So far I know that the author have a real talent and a gem.. So please keep shining...
I like the plot of the story because I am open to fantasy genres... But the synopsis is a little bit off because everyone has an up's and down situation coz that's what life is.. The exciting and challenging thing is how you will justify the situation in their up and down moment.. That's what I will be looking to.. Good luck...
I like the plot of the story and the way you right in some part is awesome and I can see a real talent.. I am not a good writers myself but... There are loopholes in the plot.. Like in reality a baby doesn't have any recollection about the very specific thing that happens in their life, specially when they are new born.. It might be safe if it is a POV of the Parent.. Second Language and dictionary is a real challenge for a three year old child what more for analization of the situation.. A baby may feel hostile towards violence and it can be traumatic for a child but somehow it will be a mistery for them of what the situation is all about.. All in all.. It is a good story and has potential.. Keep it up..
I like how close the story into reality and I like how the author write.. It's just that I am a little bit concerned about the racisms part because going back in history I know for once that not only nigerian have gone through racisms. I can understand that your people gone through a lot than others but I can't help to say that every people in this world experienced discrimination both in ordinary life and now that covid-19 exist. But it's amazing to know that other people still choose to not hurt one another and make it in a more democratic way.. And Nigerian today is experiencing a better life than the past I really think that it's something to be thankful. And in this present day being black skin, people talk it out for days but having a bad attitude toward it will remain in someone's mind..