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Enforcers

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Go read the remake Equation Zero Battle/Line

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Chapter 1The Cave

This story is no longer worked on with many chapters having been removed. Please go read Equation Zero Battle/Line the retelling and updated version of this story.

Age 1991

Father Darvin stood in his office as he slowly pulled a picture out of a cabinet. He let a deep and painful sigh escape his lips as he slowly fell to his chair.

"Why didn't you listen..." The old man muttered out as he set a picture down. The picture seemed to he some kind of drawing? In it, an orange crystal could be seen as well as several letters and numbers. "My damn foolish son. Why did you do it..."

On closer inspection, it would appear that it was a blueprint for something?

Father Darvin let out another sigh as he clinched his teeth. "Why Yuesi..." He questioned to himself as he punched his desk due to frustration. "Why! Why! Why! What the hell do I do Yusei! Why did you have to go and become that monster!" He shouted out once again. "When they find out... When they see what I kept hidden..." He clenched his teeth as he stood up punching the wall. "My village... I worked hard to protect this land... I won't let your mistake ruin it..." He said almost in a growl. "I spent twelve years making my own weapon. Your own child will kill you."

Father Darvin stood up wobbling slightly as he walked over to his door forcefully yanking it open. He nearly tripped out the door as he wandered into the hallway.

"Father Darvin..."

The Father stopped as he slowly turned to see who spoke. "Maudite..." He said slowly as his eyes locked onto the twelve-year-old girl.

"Yes..." Maudite said slowly as she took a step back. The man in front of her had a slight rose coloring to his checks... His eyes were glassy and he had a sway in his step. It wasn't that hard to deduce that the Father was plastered. And judging by the look in his eyes he didn't plan on stopping yet. Maudite gave a nervous gulp as she stepped back once more.

"Maudite..." Father Darvin said speaking the name again as he stared at the girl. 'Is it time?'

"Yes..." Maudite said again taking a third step back. She couldn't tell if the man was actually seeing her, or if he was just mindlessly replying to reply. Despite that though the Father's tired eyes stared into her innocent blue eyes.

Then slowly the man took a step forward. Then another. And another. "Maudite..." He said again though this time it almost came out as a growl. Then he marched towards her at full speed as he raised his hand up. 'I'll take that as a yes.'

Maudite instantly squeezed her eyes shut as she grabbed onto the nice warm jacket Ken had given her to keep. The girl let out a whipped expecting a slap over the head but surprisingly it never came? Rather... She felt a gentle touch on the head as Father Darvin patted the girl on the head.

"Twelve years..." Father Darvin said slowly. "Twelve years, and yet I don't think I've ever once shown you a hint of affection..." He hissed out. "I tried so hard. I tried so hard to make you hate everything. To make you want to kill. To mold you into a weapon. And yet you have such a gental soul..."

"Father Darvin-" Maudite let out a squeak when the drunken man pulled her into a hug. Then he began to cry? He just broke down into tears as he clutched onto the girl.

"It's so hard!" He said choking up. "Waking up everyday, knowing we could be wiped out by the Bestia Macht? Telling others to work on the village even though it's pointless... Trying to keep things in check! Seeing you walking around, knowing what kind of cursed bloodline you come from!"

"What?"

"And knowing where we get our food from! How we grow it! It just hurts!" The old man said sobbing.

'He thinks he can cry after everything he did to us?'

Maudite reached out patting the old man on the head shutting her other self up instantly. "What do you mean?" She questioned. "It will feel better once you tell someone and let it all out?"

Father Darvin stopped crying suddenly as he sat there. "Maudite..." He said speaking in a serious tone. "I just realized. Twelve years and not once have I ever told you anything about your family..." He said slowly as he stood up. He let out a deep sigh. "Come with me..."

"What! My family?" Maudite said only to realize that Father Darvin was already marching off. She let out a slight yelp and started following after the bumbling drunken Father.

Father Darvin, marched straight out the doors, and into the snow. Maudite hesitated but followed soon after. The two walked quickly past the rubble of what was once a village. Finally, after a few minutes, they arrived at a massive hole in the ground.

The Father grabbed the hand of the twelve-year-old girl and didn't hesitate to jump down causing them both to crash painfully to the ground.

The older man let out a groan but quickly stood back up as he dragged the girl over to a large stone wall. Then slowly he reached up and placed his hand on it.

"This... This was created by me..." The Father said muttering slightly. "Behind it... Behind it is where your father and mother died... This is where my Son rests."

Meanwhile...

"Holy shit!"

"What the hell!"

"Kitsune!"

"Big Brother what happened?"

"Thank God that wasn't me!"

"Ken, Hero, Cloud get off of me you're heavy!"

Everyone stared in shock as a hand reached from the darkness of the cave and wrapped around the young fox Noble, and just straight up yanked him kicking, and screaming into the dark abyss!

"God Damn it!" Jackson cursed out. "Alright! Let's go get him!"

"We're going in there!"

"Yes!"

"Like all of us at once? Wouldn't it be smarter to split the party?"

"No!"

"Why?"

"Because I said so!" Jackson announced marching forward. "Now come on! We are not letting Kitsune die to whatever the hell took him!"

"Wow..." Irene said slightly surprised. "I thought he hated Kitsune?"

'Shit, shit, shit! If Kitsune dies, then Katrina will skin me alive!' Jackson thought in pure panic mode.

"What happened to everything being dead!" Ken shouted in a panic.

"Hey!" Anga said throwing his arms up. "It was trapped for twelve years! How the hell was I supposed to know it would be alive?"

"It? Well, what the hell is it anyways?" Cloud questioned.

"How should I know!"

"Everyone shut up!" Zero shouted causing everyone to stop. "Look! We are all going in there at the same time, and getting that boy back! It doesn't matter what is in the cave. If we all team up on it, then it really won't matter!" He shouted out.

"I guess..." Hero said shrugging.

"Can I sit you down now?" Anga asked staring at Hero, Cloud and Ken who were still both in his arms, and around his neck.

"Sure..." Hero said jumping out of Anga's arms. "I do agree with Zero's plans though." He said as he dropped Ken to the floor. "Also. We are probably just wasting time! Let's go now before anything happens."

Everyone took a deep breath and quickly walked forward into the darkness. They didn't have time to consider what they were getting themselves into. Kitsune was in trouble right now. He probably wouldn't appreciate it if the group let him die simply because they were scared.

Then again if he did die then he wouldn't really be caring about the group now would he?

The party moved forward all of them practically jogging as they all went down a sloping straight hill. It went down, at an almost awkward angle. There was nothing but pitch darkness... Finally, though a small light could be seen up ahead.

It looked almost like fire?

"Kitsune!" Ken said with realization The group hurried forward finally finishing the slope as they came into a large open room...

The room was extremely large. Nearly half a mile big... The roof was visible but was still extremely high. The room looked to be made out of polished stone? The room was also filled with several large stone pillars. It was all really confusing, but one thing was for sure.

Whatever this room was, it was man-made...

Light-filled the room from several orbs of fire. Up above the ground, they heard a panicked yell as the body of Kitsune came crashing down. He was back in his Nine-Tailed form, so he was apparently the culprit behind the light, as the fire made from his tails, and ears, lit up the area in an orange glow...

"Kitsune?" Irene said when she saw a quick look of fear in Kitsune's eyes as he looked at them. No... Not them. But rather the thing behind them. "Uh oh..." Irene said slowly as she could feel a pair of eyes on her from behind.

The whole group could in fact...

They all slowly turned around and they finally saw it... The monster.

It stood at 6 "4" feet tall, and had long frail-looking arms and legs. Its joints looked kind of weird and were snapped differently allowing them to bend in ways human arms simply couldn't. The creature had an almost human-looking head, but it was missing a nose... The entire thing also had extremely flesh that was almost as white as the snow, and a pair of horns on its head that looked to be covered in what looked like a dark blue metal? It had two glowing orange eyes that seemed to light up in the dark. It had a stupid amount of teeth causing its face to he stuck in a permanent smile. A blue aura covered its body as it slowly cocked its head at the group who all stared at it with shock, and fear. 

But it wasn't the creatures appearance that was scaring them. Yes, the thing did look absolutely creepy, but that wasn't what bothered any of them.

No.

What bothered them was what it was wearing.

Yes. This thing was wearing clothing, showing off the terrifying fact that it wasn't a Bestia Macht.

This thing was a human...

And the clothing it was wearing.

A ripped up, and heavily stained, lab coat...

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3 :Volume Three
4 :Volume Four

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MyMoneymoneymoney
MyMoneymoneymoneyLv1

I feel so weird writing this review because I wanted to like this story. And part of me does like it. But I also f##king hate it lol. Okay let's start off with this. The Arthur isn't really a bad writer. He set up the world really well and it was easy to follow. Killer monsters, people with powers fights them, good guys are Enforcers. Easy. The first half of Volume One is Good. Really good. At least a3.5 or 4 out of 5. And then you get to the rest... So first off. A compliant. It's f##king long. The first half of volume one is good but so stupidly long. The first chapter is nearly 5000 words. F##k. And it gets longer... Also you can tell it's his first story and the writing is meh. That gets better. But the story gets worse. Volume Two is f##ked. Kind of. The final part of volume one, and the first half of volume two feel mega rushed. I feel like he just made s##t up that he thought would be cool. Thankfully the second half of Volume Two was good. Again. Better than volume one. But I don't want to go through s##t to get a semi valuable diamond. Now Volume 3... What? What even is it? I feel like s##t just happens to happen. The lovable characters are gone there's like 15 plots and its just bad. And spoiler so don't read this part if you care about that it ends on a rebbot? It just ends. Hero dies. Story restarts... Why! That's so stupid and so dumb. I hate it. Legit hate it. Not good at all. So Volume 3 has ended and the Arthur has rebooted the entire story. Volume 4 is volume one again but with some changes. And.. It's good. I mean it's a f##king stupid plot point and a mess to get to it, the Volume so far is the best. It as the easy and fun story of Volume One, with the improved writing. It really feels like its own story and not a part of Enforcers? But still Enforcers? Its weird. I'm gonna keep reading because I know the story is good. It just bad also? It's so weird? The comments are a meme and is just off I guess? So heres what I say. Read Volume one, skip 2, and 3, and go straight to 4. By the end of Volume one you'll know if you enjoy these characters or not.

KnIvialDanial0002
KnIvialDanial0002Lv2

Okay. Here is an honest review of what I think of the story so far. As of right now there are 28 chapters so anything in the comment may not be true anymore. Also I won't spoil anything. So. First of all what do I think of the story. It is a good story. And I mean that. It has an interesting idea, and has some really (at least to me) cool super powers, and monsters. It has some interesting character that I do hope to see expanded on. While I do feel some can do better I personally don't hate any of them. Secondly. The grammar is good, but in terms of that I am heavily biased. I have been reading so many stories that have so many mistakes that after reading this one it was refreshing. Now it does mess up so it is by no means perfect. Hell it does have a few mistakes in writing now that I think back on it but compared to some of the other 'stories' I have read a few mistakes are things I can forgive. Now for what is the biggest problem I have with this story. The length of it... This story is a massive slow burn! It takes like 20 chapters before the plot starts working... Now usually I wouldn't mind that but the chapters are so God Damn long... Like stupidly long... There's a point where there are 5 chapters all with at least 5k words in a row!!! Now look. I do like long chapters, but damn! Now if you like long chapters than you'll like it. Now I will say it does seem to be speeding up? Maybe? I dunno. The plot seems to be moving now which is good... But seriously I hope those chapters start to get shorter considering the fact that with the massive chapters and the slow burn plot it can be annoying. Thankfully I do like the characters, and there are some funny jokes that keep me in. So all in all if you have time go ahead and read this. But be warned as it will take time to finish this one...

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