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RobertJohn2000
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2019-11-11 16:21

Well I finally into reading your storu finally. Sniper kept bugging me to do it saying you could use the help. And what the hell I forced you to read my stuff more times then I can count. I'm glad to see you managed to get this story going. All of us kept trying but just couldn't get it right. Oh well. to the actual review. I like the story but then again I helped with like 10% so I am a bit bisas with my review. Sniper went full critic mode but ill be mpore gental. I do like it. The ear;y chapters are kind of bad but around the train station which is the last capter is where it gets good to me. Ken and Hero are kind of funny. I like how Hero looks. I look forward to seeing what else will happen. I hate Kitsunes chapter though. The action almost dulled me and Kitsune just seems like a typical rich boy. Feels more like a card board in the shape of a man. That said I do enjoy reading this story and I know you can do a lot better. I look forward to seeing you improve.

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I like how Sniper has had a punt for like a year now and he still has the default picture but you just got yours and you already changed it... Never change Robert.

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