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Sis-Con with Dimensional Chat Group

Auteur: akikan40
Anime et bandes dessinées
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Synopsis

10 chapters / week This is a work of fiction. Names, characters, business, events and incidents are the products of the author's imagination. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental. --- He had been reincarnated, he thought that he didn't cheat until suddenly he noticed someone invite him on a group chat. [Do you wish to join Dimensional Chat Group?] MC: "Accept!" --------------------------------------------- Cover not mine, it's from anime Yosuga no Sora --------------------------------------------- Grammar sometimes sucks but bear with it. https://discord.gg/Q3MFzds If you want to tell me there is a grammar mistake. --------------------------------------------- https://www.patreon.com/akikan40 Maybe I'll be full of energy to write your favorite fanfic.

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46 Chs
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Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv3

The writer has a lot of issues and, honestly, doesn't feel ready to write stories in English yet. There are a -lot- of grammar issues, and massive perspective problems in every single chapter. As for the story itself.. the self-insert is a fairly successful novel writer (yeaaahhhh.. no) who acts pretty unnaturally given his reincarnated situation; the reincarnated part of his character seems mostly glossed over and forgotten. He doesn't use it for anything, and the relationship with his sister is exactly the same as in canon, even though there is an older, completely different person in the body of this character. In fact, all of the characters feel extremely unnatural as a whole. People who should have no concept of technology or anime or anything just pick up on it without explanation and act like it's the most normal thing in the world. Characters' thought processes are unbelievable at best. Very clearly written in one sitting, putting thoughts into words and then isn't properly edited, and it makes it feel incoherent and is difficult to read. It's often written like the writer assumes we know what he's thinking and why he's thinking it, and jumps two or three steps in the buildup and explanation, only to land on something that feels completely out of place as a result. An example would be the different characters sending information over the phone. How? It's never explained. First off, how are these technologically stupid people just sending "magic" and "swordsplay" over a phone? How is he receiving it? It's never even explored or explained a little bit, but just taken completely for granted and passed over. It's absolutely ridiculous. Then there's the ghosts. He brings them cakes, but when the girl tries to hug them, she passes through them? Are they solid or not? The logic of the story's world is completely screwed. Not to mention that the kids weren't actually used for anything at all other than getting every character to say "G-g-g-ghost!" like they're Scooby Doo and forcing an interaction with that one girl. Even the set up emotional reunion was completely ruined by them just disappearing the second they saw her, and nothing further was explored about it. Not to mention how the character learns "swordplay" by.. getting a manual about it(? somehow it changes to paper from his phone?) and then swinging his sword the same way 1000 times, like that is supposed to teach him anything. When you know nothing about the sword, you have a thousand things to learn before you even start swinging that thing around. Your posture, movement, grip, etc. etc. You don't just go and start swinging a sword and become a swordsman, and even then, swinging just one way isn't going to make you any better at anything; it's so silly. The protagonist starts talking about opening up a restaurant out of absolutely nowhere. Like, it wasn't built up in any way, and the writer clearly just wanted to do it for whatever reason, even if it made no sense in-universe. It was justified because the character "knew a guy with a restaurant" and that he would get recipes sent over. Like that solves more than one or two out of a thousand problems with opening up a restaurant, and prepares him for that chaos in any way whatsoever These are a few examples, but already this soon in the story there are even more I could pull from, and I'm positive it will continue throughout the whole thing. Basically, it feels like whoever writes this doesn't live in the real world. Their logic is completely off in so many ways. It really feels like the writer has gotten too deeply integrated in the universe of anime himself and has forgotten how actual people think, act and speak, and it really shows in the writing. Overall, it just comes off as disconnected and childish. I don't know why this story is rated 4.6. Either the negative reviews are deleted or you guys just have insanely low standards. 2.4 was already generous for me. For the writer: Work harder on your basics. Spend some time figuring out your English grammar and read some well-written, published stories to try and get a better feel for how to actually present a decent story. Your ideas aren't terrible, but your execution is very lacking; especially for someone clearly wanting to make money off of this. It takes a lot of hard work to get good at something, and writing is no different. Good luck.

Etiger789
Etiger789Lv15
Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

The story started well, but over time it got boring and repetitive. It seems that the author is afraid to make the MC too strong and that is why he is giving bad powers and pretending he doesn't have a store to buy powers. The mc has a dungeon that when entering the time stops in his world but is complaining about lack of time to train. Honestly, mc practically stopped growing in the Magi world. He gained a greater variety of powers, but apart from some op equipment he didn't grow much in strength. the author is too focused on making mc the richest man in the world instead of focusing on the chat group. Besides, it is kind of strange that MC monopolize all missions and nobody complains. Worst of all, despite the fact that the MC increases in the harem in all the worlds he goes to and always says how he cares about his girlfriends, the MC basically leaves and forgets the relationship after returning to his world. So far he hasn't seen any of the girls he left behind again (except 2 who are members of the chat group). In short: The story went from focusing on the chat group to focusing on mc becoming a tycoon and developing the harem in his original world while extolling every day how big his dick is and the resistance in the bed is incredible in addition to how much he loves girlfriends (despite abandoning most of them) The chat group became something secondary that only serves to act like an asshole by deceiving innocent women to never return. sorry for any mistake, i wrote using google translator

Fifth_Goose
Fifth_GooseLv5
Fifth_Goose
Fifth_GooseLv5
keke171
keke171Lv4

Let me do an honest review with strengths and weaknesses in this story. Writing quality (4/5): grammatical errors appear here and there and words are repeated in the same sentence sometimes but in general it is good Stability of updates (4/5): I can't say much but it seems to be good according to the history and update date, but some readers sometimes comment that the author has a history of dropped stories so 4/5 is enough note Story Development (2/5): the story starts with yosuga no sora the MC has memories of his previous life and becomes a writer copying a story of it, then he receives the mysterious group chat app and other people from other world are invited like tsunade (naruto), yojima (fairy tail), kuroneko (oreimo) and gintoki (gintama) the MC never suspects anything of the semi-omnipotent app that can transport people to another world and sell powers in the store, the worst thing here is that the MC believes in "destiny", he believes that it is impossible not to follow the destiny of the original anime he is part of (he is the MC of yosuga no sora) so he doesn't even try to go against the incestuous romance with his sister, he simply follows the flow, he lies to himself saying he doesn’t want to get into a relationship but flirts with every girl he sees, he’s very hypocritical and in chapter 157 (where I dropped it) you see it clearly, you just need to read 156 and then 157. character design (1.5 / 5): the author simply inserted female characters while thinking with the penis, more and more female characters appear and the MC flirts with all of them, even has sex with some of them without commitment, the female characters don't have much personality and fall in love with the MC without reason, simply because he is "charming", Sora (his little sister) for example is sticky and the only thing he talks to the MC is asking if he will leave her and where and with whom he was , it's just ridiculous, besides there being so many new girls included all the time that you even forget some of them, the MC's personality is also bad, similar to the typical villain of xianxia + harem protagonist who is taken by the flow, whenever he sees something incredible he covets, feels envious or says he doesn't feel envy because in the future he will be as strong or rich as that person, says he is not arrogant but believes that he can get a perfect score in a test while focusing on 3 others isas instead of the test itself, he believes that he is on the same level as a national athlete practicing swordsman being that he only trained 2 months while they do it for a lifetime. but what broke the limit was in chapter 157, in chapter 156 he decides to enter into a relationship with one of the characters, but in chapter 157, when not even 24 hours have passed he takes the initiative to enter into a relationship with his sister !? Okay, I understand that the title already says that, although not always a siscon enters into a relationship with the sister, but it was more or less predictable than in the case of him, but he ignores the feelings of Kato (the girl who confessed him in 156) and to relate to the sister in 157 as if it were nothing, and that just tells me that he is an incorrigible hypocritical scum. world backgroung (3.5 / 5): the main world of MC is a union of several worlds with several characters from various anime / manga, which is interesting, but the author exaggerated and even put characters with abnormals there, also has little information about the characters which makes them simply names, and forgettable also due to the size of the harem in conclusion it is a story that has good fights although they are few, interesting powers but I think it needed to be explored more mainly the magic of light and the chakra, but very bad in the romance, harem, randomness, and characters in general mainly with regard to personality, including the MC.

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