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My Elf System

Auteur: PhoenixAsh
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Synopsis

Orion was on his way back home from work. He was hurrying back home to take a nap while planning how he would spend his weekend as well, but while he was lost in thought, a truck suddenly appeared out of nowhere and the last thing he remembered was the truck barreling towards him before everything around him turned dark. However to his surprise, he didn’t feel any pain after having the accident. In fact, he couldn’t see anything. Everything around him seemed dark but when he opened his mouth to speak, he heard the gurgling sounds of a baby. Noticing that the one sounding like a baby was him, Orion tried to open his eyes to know exactly where he was, but when he did, the first thing his eyes fell upon was a stunning beautiful elf, holding him with the most tenderest of care. Not only was she his mother, she was also a queen as well and she had a beautiful sister who adored him just as much as his mother. Aside from this, Orion also noticed he had received a system which allowed him to grow and evolve faster than a normal High Elf but after finding out the huge role his mother played in eradicating the war between all races, Orion vowed to live a happy and fulfilling life with his mother, aunt and a few others he cared a lot about.

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Volume 1 :Awakening Arc
Volume 2 :Vol 2:- Noble Elf Tournament Arc
Volume 3 :Bonding Arc
Volume 4 :Fallen Angels Kingdom Arc
Volume 5 :Activity Club Tournament Arc

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Review after 163 chapters. I think the quality of writing is very good. The author takes care of the details, which is something to be appreciated. Nothing to say about the updates. The world background is acceptable, although I find it generic. The story development is horrible. The novel is very poorly planned. In the first 83 chapters there are two time jumps, the first of ten years and the second of eight years. These time jumps should not have been so abrupt, because events in those years that are interesting have been lost. Although the author has commented that he will do a flashback arc of the eight-year jump, said arc will only be empty chapters because all the interest has already disappeared. I don't understand why such a rush, because it diminishes the quality of a novel. Instead of jumping several years, he jumps weeks or months. Now, in 83 chapters you have an MC who is too powerful, even his time at the academy is useless. The MC system also seems too powerful. In 163 chapters, the MC hasn't had any difficult challenges. He always solves everything too easily. Attention! If the goal is for the novel to only have 300-500 chapters then I think it's justified to empower the MC so quickly. The character design is also horrible. All characters lack personality. Emotions are not transmitted to the reader through actions or conversations. Final words. I'm glad to read a novel with an elf as the protagonist, I really wanted to read a novel like that. Unfortunately this novel has aspects that have been neglected. To the author. I hope this review can help you improve as a writer. Each person has their own preferences and opinions, and it's impossible to write a novel that everyone likes. Not to mention, it seems like this is your first novel. I'm leaving you with power stones.

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