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2024-10-07 01:41

please mia mother is in harem I want author preeeetyy please 🙏 😢 😭 😫 😔

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Review after 163 chapters. I think the quality of writing is very good. The author takes care of the details, which is something to be appreciated. Nothing to say about the updates. The world background is acceptable, although I find it generic. The story development is horrible. The novel is very poorly planned. In the first 83 chapters there are two time jumps, the first of ten years and the second of eight years. These time jumps should not have been so abrupt, because events in those years that are interesting have been lost. Although the author has commented that he will do a flashback arc of the eight-year jump, said arc will only be empty chapters because all the interest has already disappeared. I don't understand why such a rush, because it diminishes the quality of a novel. Instead of jumping several years, he jumps weeks or months. Now, in 83 chapters you have an MC who is too powerful, even his time at the academy is useless. The MC system also seems too powerful. In 163 chapters, the MC hasn't had any difficult challenges. He always solves everything too easily. Attention! If the goal is for the novel to only have 300-500 chapters then I think it's justified to empower the MC so quickly. The character design is also horrible. All characters lack personality. Emotions are not transmitted to the reader through actions or conversations. Final words. I'm glad to read a novel with an elf as the protagonist, I really wanted to read a novel like that. Unfortunately this novel has aspects that have been neglected. To the author. I hope this review can help you improve as a writer. Each person has their own preferences and opinions, and it's impossible to write a novel that everyone likes. Not to mention, it seems like this is your first novel. I'm leaving you with power stones.

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