Reviews of The Mage of Primordial Chaos
The Mage of Primordial Chaos
Cyclxne
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
It's been more than 5 months since I first started writing this series, so I thought I would come back to leave another review. For new readers of this series, please read this review FIRST, before picking up the novel. I will be listing some of the pros and cons of this novel here, and since everyone has different tastes, this novel is obviously not going to be for the entire population of Webnovel. Please don't complain about things later on in the story if I already clearly listed them here. So, without any further ado, I will start with the cons first, then talk about the good points later. CONS: - Harem. This is based on personal preference, so I won't say too much. Some people may find harem a pro of this novel, others may consider it a con. - Boring early chapters. The early chapters (roughly chapters 1-10) of this novel are quite boring since characters are just getting introduced and our MC doesn't have any powers at all. After he awakens his powers though, that's when the fun truly starts. - Cliches. Like any other story, there are some cliches within this one as well. For example, OP MC beats the guys who think he is weak, and he gets all the cute girls. HOWEVER, I've tried my best to keep cliches to a minimal, especially after the early chapters. Please focus on the plot development of the story instead of the slight cliches here and there. Also, keep in mind - cliches are cliches for a reason. - Chinese factors. In my opinion, most of my readers shouldn't be too concerned about the Chinese names (in Pingyin, not actual Chinese characters) proverbs, and traditions incorporated within this story, but nevertheless, I thought I would include this in the cons of this novel. If you have a problem with Chinese names or culture, I won't judge. Keep in mind everything is still written in pronunciable English, so no need to worry about not being able to understand what I'm writing. - Weak MC at first. In the beginning, the MC is powerless and has a weak will as well. He is constantly thinking of just giving up, and therefore is dragged/pushed around by others a lot in the beginning. He will slowly develop as he gains his power though - it is a weak-to-strong novel, after all. PROS: - World-building. This novel has a unique system, whether it's the 21 elements or casting process. It's like a mixture of Eastern Cultivation Fantasy and Western Magic. I could give more examples, but I suggest just reading the novel itself instead. Also, the world it is set in is more or less similar to the world we know. Thus, it should be easy for you to visualize scenary and such. - Writing Quality. There are little to no grammar, spelling, and/or capitalization mistakes within this novel. While English isn't my first language, I do use a grammar checker tool when I write, so there shouldn't be any major problems. - Harem. As said earlier, this can be a con for some people; it depends on preference, really. - Plot development. While the early chapters are slightly boring since MC doesn't have any powers (yet), after around Chapter 11 or so the story begins getting steadily better from there. Please read until then to decide whether ot not this story is worth it to keep reading. - Characters. Each of my main characters unique, and have different personalities. Some even experience slight personality changes throughout the story, as a major event happens (Volume 3, cough). Character development is also steadily happening, especially for the MC. - Mysterious. While this story is written in first-person (MC's perspective most of the time), not everything is directly laid bare (MC's thoughts, etc). There are both mysterious/unknown aspects regarding MC's abilities and the world itself that are hinted at but won't be revealed until the time is right. If you like imagining and guessing at what those mysteries might be, this novel's - or rather, my writing style may suit you. - Stability of Updates. Currently releasing 1 chapter daily, despite being busy with school. Wow, I wrote a lot. Sorry to all of you who're just trying to begin reading. I just thought it was necessary to list the pros and cons of the novel here so that readers know some basic aspects of what they will be reading. I hope I wasn't just doing something extra. Anyway, even if there are some points in here you dislike, I'd suggest still giving the story a try. Who knows? Perhaps the good will outweigh the bad. And if it does, well - make sure to smash that vote button with a sledgehammer and add this novel to your collection. That's all from me for now. - Cyclxne
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It is a really good story with great potential and written well too. The one things that stands out is the MC's personality. Even with a bit of dark side, he still has basic human feelings and very mature for his age because of his life experiences. I didnt find any grammar errors but with a bit editing and fine tuning of the plot line, it has all the ingredients to be popular. All the best
Honestly, it would be better if the novel was 3rd POV. I'm not saying the 1st POV was bad, it i just that it would feel more comfortable and more enjoyable if it was 3rd POV. Your story is good, i hope you don't stop and keep the good work. Only slight mistakes but the 1st person perspective is really not for me. I don't know, last time, i was fine with it, but now... Nevertheless, i will continue reading your story for the sake of harem and romance and some overpowered shits LOL!
The story itself is great, the idea behind the story isn't unique but it's still entertaining. if you didn't read many novels you could find this novel great, but if you have some experience you will notice a few problems. The author use 1st point of view in his story which is quite uncommon and worthy of praise but this is also the main problem of the story. There were few time in which a sentence written in 3rd pov (which doesn't supposed to appear in a 1st pov story) and suddenly transition to 1st pov. another thing to note is that the author has great ideas and nice mentality but it's hard to bring them into the story without sounding cringey or stupid coming from the mc himself. All in all, the story is great but the writing quality bring it down a notch and denying it's true potential, if you don't mind such stuff then it a great read.
As of right now I have read over 30 chapters and I have just started volume 3. The story overall is pretty good and the world building is pretty amazing with all the different races and their lore (although we have yet to see any other race in the story but they were mentioned in the auxiliary section). The mc is like any other. He starts weak and then becomes overpowered. But this mc is not really fighting that much. From what I have read so far he has only fought like 2 times. I know the author is trying to give character development to the female characters (the harem characters), but at some point the story was just the mc getting girls left and right. I don't hate harem but having an mc with such a cool power but having him barely use it is a bit frustrating. I liked having the mc hang around with the female characters but I was also expecting more battles and have him prove himself to everyone who treated him like trash. But so far he swore he would get revenge but it seems like he forgot. The magic system in the novel is also pretty good in my opinion. We have 21 different magic branches while the mc has a special one. There are also some pretty unique magic powers in the novel while you also have your normal powers that you can expect from this type of novel. The humor is also pretty good and there were a few times a was laughing out loud. Overall the novel is pretty good but it lacks some action from a novel about mages. Still I enjoy the novel and there seems to be a bit of mystery in the novel so I will keep reading it. :)
Very good writing, but some very minor grammar errors which I suggested to Cyclxne to correct. Very regular updates, and when he changes the schedule, he lets readers know in advance. Keeps the plot constantly moving and has the occasional filler episode, which are placed very well as to provide a good contrast to the main plot. The character backgrounds are very strong and why everyone is in the book is explained; there are no random character appearances. In depth foreword to the world of TMOPC and how everything works in it. Overall, great story, great writing and great author. I hope this webnovel continues for years to come.
It's a good and well rounded story, the progression is a bit slow especially in the beginning where it dregs a bit. Quality wise the story is stable, no major flaws, the flow and timing is good. The Development of the Characters is pretty cliche, the MC warned of it. But it's a solid story in a solid world. Personally I'm not a big fan of the Development but that is not for a lack of quality but because it's more mystery and drama heavy than I anticipated, and I'm not in the mood for something like that. But doesn't take away that the story itself is a nice read
