Reviews of The Devil Inside(mha)[dropped]
The Devil Inside(mha)[dropped]
Damz
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Holy fucking shit this is stupid. He is ostracized because he can manipulate darkness and has reptilian eyes? Bullshit. Tokoyami has a sentient being of darkness and still gets into U.A. Kuroiro is literally made of darkness and he got into U.A. Writing sucks too. Characters are non-relatable and not realistic. Yeah. Overall, 1/10.
So far it’s interesting and it make me want to see what happens next. It’s a pretty good read imo, though it may not suits everyone’s taste. If you’re looking for a Mac with a tragic background who lost his old self and became cold and badass this can be for you, the grammar isn’t bad, and the character designs are pretty cool. I suggest at least giving it a try
I like the concept of the two twins and their opposing powers, the world background of all that regards heroes is pretty confusing and clunky, but the 3 man team is wonderful, finally some fic where the MC is with the bros instead of the classical naruto style team with the protag, the powerful but actually weak as **** girl that seems the heroine but she isn't and the sidekick/rival. The story development is pretty linear and predictable but still nice.
Its absolute garbage the whole thing feels rushed the characters have no personality and twins don't just separate like that because some kinds say bad stuff about the other and also what the actual **** why are like 5-year-old kids blushing like why the **** would a kid in like grade 1 think oooohh my gaaawwd hhheees soooo hawwt like holy **** you make the kids sound and act like fucking teenagers like Jesus fucking Christ have you ever seen a kid or even talked to one before and don't even get me started on the parents they have no personality at all other than the fact that they hate one kid and love the other also there is absolutely no world building at all its literally just ooooh no you control the darkness no me the smart and responsible parent that I am hate you and I'm going to send you off to some little ripoff concentration camp also the MC friends don't make any sense at all like some little fucking Endevor hell spawn would not be going to the garbage school that the main character goes to the Endevor family is like super fucking rich you **** dumb ass just because Endevor is a little shit doesn't mean his family is fucking poor like Jesus Christ there literally a family of pro hero's that pay for wives and stuff to have stronger kids holy shit I'm dropping this but I wish you luck on your future endeavours and I hope you improve however if you're looking for some little emo shit kid book this is the book for you any way end of rant good day to you.
Honestly speaking, i was about to drop the book in the first few chapters. You’re ideas were good but the execution was too forced. But you’re writing has improved ten-fold since then and I can say that this fic from when Damien came to Japan onwards is one of the better MHA fics. Just try to rewrite or refine the first 20 chapters if you have the time. Please update soon!
The beginning of the story was great, but the limited vision of the author made the story bad especially how he made the hero in the same division as Midoriya and others. Also, changing the hero’s mentality is neither rational nor logical. It was a story that would be amazing if it made the hero evil. Unfortunately, it made the hero a boring person. Especially by making the hero can kill the third strongest character only at the age of 12 years. I think from that moment you ran out of new and innovative ideas. Unfortunately you made a junkyard story with amazing prospects because of your limited ideas
