Review Detail of Master_Celestial in The Devil Inside(mha)[dropped]

Riddled with plotholes. Like every major event has at least several of them... Characters change their personality and opinion as often as their underwear. Grammar has a lot of mistakes and you often need to decipher the sentences. The whole thing with Assassin training etc is bad executed. Like the author has no idea what a Assassin is or is supposed to do and how this work will develop with Damiens personality. Btw Damien was when he was 4 years old for 2 years in a completely white room and got experimented on every day. Torturous experiments if I may add. But his personality was like a person who got isolated formulier whole life. No split-personality, he is not insane and doesn‘t even keep his habit of talking with his shadow clones. When he is allowed a request, he asks to kill his father when that guy only mistreated him for a day while the Organisation with the white room literally tortured him for 2 years. Still loves his brother years later, when that guy literally abonded him for friends he only knew for less than a year If I remember right. Alice, his childhood sweetheart forgot him after 6 years I think and never blames his brother Stefan. And wtf his parents treated him like family even after knowing his quirk, but directly after knowing what he did, they treated him like something that should’ve exist and have no emotional turmoil or other things. Also please explain How 4 - 6 years old people can blush and think someone that is 4 years old is so hot and sexy. He should look like a baby with a lot of baby fat on his body. And Damien when he was 4 or 5 I think introduced himself and „devilishly“ smirked at the girls... Explanation is that he watched a lot of romance movies and some other. After General Armstrong’s death (or what his name is) ,who was their father figure, they just forget about him seconds later. This is just a wishfullfilment story with no thoughts put in of what to write. Like „Oh, an Assassin mc in MHA sounds interesting. Let‘s write about it with no planning whatsoever!!!“ At least try please. I liked the Idea but the execution is so flawed and horrible that you can‘t make heads or tails of it. Well, these are my thoughts and I know that there are bound to be grammar mistakes and spelling errors or whatever because just as the author, English is not my native language. Greetings from Germany!