Drack
Writing quality could be better especially the grammar, but it seems to be getting better. The story so far is really good. How the book looks right now i can see it only getting better and better. The interactions between characters have been well written so far. Only thing im worrying about, is how the girls will change once, they are in a realtionship with Alexander.
I give this story enough chance, but it's can't go forever. Pacing of the story is extremely slow.... No that's not right, people might think there some development aside his base growth-it's non-existent. And I mean it! Character growth- none, beside mature girls struggling to not fall for 12 years kid. Mc is in another dimension, he is dumb as horny brat, why you need to have him reincarnated - I don't know. It's doesn't add anything beside some knowledge about anime.... You can bs,that system just uploaded it in his brain, would be more tolerable. Priorities of the story is extremely screwed, we-readers come to see anime/game worlds and harem, but beside very bad and plain hstod there is none! Even girls have like 3 rate of priorities. You would think, hey, he must be training or learn how to be ruler? Nope, he doesn't do anything! His first priority is, to find more people for his camp and reduce population of zombies - it's boring!power system - stupid joke. He grow a little bit stronger then grow up men after killing directly or indirectly over 100 thousand zombies, that can evolve.... Oh, really? You know what this story is essentially? Cultivation ****-story! When autor try to squeeze as much words as he can and make useless, stupid arcs that doesn't have much meaning or give some enjoyment... Nothing. Even writing doesn't get better over 100 chapters, because he doesn't even trying. trying. Anyway, don't read it, I'm suffer, but you shouldn't. P.s. I'm sure he would delete this review, because there are no other ways, how this fanfic can have such a good score. At least read it before!
Another gamer system fic. You got the MC who gets blessed by the origin of the universe. What does he do with his new found power???? He monologues the whole world for about 8 chapters with his systems help. Then he summons a hot chick to help him out in a *cough*, High Tier World.... remember this girl is suppose to be really weak and comes from earth. Then after some additional frustration I decided to drop this story from how boring it became as I started to skim through the chapters. Also I couldn't forget that small detail of your SI being a freaking trap.
trash ass fanfic, the author deletes the reviews that are not 4 stars and up and i keep seeing the same person copy and past 5 starts over and over ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
WOW nice Spam bot you got there Michael_Garcia_7550 LOL. So now the Review It Startet Very Good but when the Mc Got to the High School of the Dead it goes worse no Character devoempent at all there allready 100 chaps there. And com on why the **** did you give him a body of a 12 Year old and give him girls ?He cant do **** with them. Its like you go to an Inpotent guy give him a Golden Ticket and says with this you can go to any Borthel and get your freak on for free.Makes no sence at all.
I liked it at first but somewhere along the boring prolonged highschool of the dead arc, it somehow made me (a fan of hotd and it's fanfics) hate it. It became so boring that I thought I was watching the paint in a wall to dry. You can actually see how small the creativity of the author when there is no guidelines to go through. I mean it was better to watch a wall dry than to put up with the latest parts cause the wall won't annoy you with stupid kingdom building arc (where I'm confident that if he implements that in hotd/reality that it would definitely fall), stupid unrealistic love life (I mean seriously? You're either romantically retarded or you really have an ego where romance can only exist with mind control. I would pity you but you deserve it.), and stupidly boring plots where sexual innuendos was the only slightly interesting thing that exist (slightly interesting as in looking at a misplaced dirty magazine in a dentist's waiting room. Yeah, without the the mainstory guideline from the orig anime, **** got boring to the point that I was only reading it cause I was hoping it would stop to suck after the hotd arc is finished but you actually prolonged it.) I mean how stupid can you get when you thought a kid who uses his subordinate as a stand just to make him taller was a good way of getting respect and allegiance, when you thought that making a the orig mc's life a living hell would attract his mother, and when you thought a typical "young master" as an mc is attractive to the girls you picked? Yeah, stick to the mind control at least in fiction someone "loves" you if you call it that.
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I have never read such boring novel like this, everything makes you bore like there is no comedy, no romance and all fighting scenes have description of how mc feels like fear, hesitation etc. Here writer has make such novel only to increase its chapter rather than make reader to enjoy his/her work just like chinese fanfic//
honestly i'm afraid this story is getting lost, the mindset of this mc is too immature, at least in terms of self control of things about desire and things about attraction about the opposite sex, and this is gradually changing the quality of the story, the worse is that the MC recognizes his defects but does nothing to mature and on the contrary seems to like it that way, I donโt want an MC who wants to be holy or like women, but also a man who lets himself be carried away in thoughts and actions by his desires and compulsions are simply weak of mind and this is, as I said, seriously undermining the quality of this story.
While I enjoyed parts of the story. the age of the MC and the fact that he is thinking with his dick 90% of the time kind of ruined this story. I mean letโs face it he had a choice to be older in the beginning and who really would WANT to be the youngest age possible in a unknown world where anything can happen.
I like the story, but there are many things that irritate me. Protagonist didnโt spend a week in the new world before traveling to another world. So, limited world background that is then put behind. He should be able to do whatever he wants, but the system is basically telling him what to do with the missions. In the second world, he suddenly turned into an arrogant and shameless harem seeker, when the main purpose should have been gaining strength for a little while before leaving, not collecting women. Lack of forethought when he knows whatโs going to happen, a system to help, and an intelligent girl that he had chosen for her intellect but spend his time giving instructions instead of telling her what he has in mind and asking her advice or alternatives. Her intelligence is half-wasted. Turned T.S from a pragmatic guy to a naive idealistic guy. The kind of guy that shouldnโt have gained that much influence in the first place. It feels like the author was jealous of guy instead of the protagonist. His daughter also fell too easily for him considering her character. Not a week had passed and there were already advanced mutations. The evolution is too fast for a change that is supposed to take at least half a century.