commandergenerals
As much as I hate to make an early review, it is just too short. Each chapter is too short that 3 to 4 chapters could only be considered as one chapter when you read it. Something that isn't really passable unless it is something like a prologue, epilogue or something along the lines. There's not much to say about storyline so far as a slice-of-life situation going on with a few supernatural stuff here and there, specially with the prologue long chapters that gets nowhere close to an actual situation to piece it up together to barely even get a feel on what is actually going on. So there's no need to discuss about that. Chances are: this is like others using the ranking strat or the author just pretty much lacking any motivation to type more and just leave it, giving it a feel of what looks more of someone making a summary rather than an essay as intended. (well, whatever reason goes) For now, I would leave it at an average of three stars. If the author can spend some more time to add more and lengthen each chapter without looking like half-done, it would be getting a better rating from me. As oppose to those who just give out high rates without a care of causing people to waste time because of a misreview.
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It's a good idea, however there are major issues you have to fix. 1) The chapters are so fucking short it's stupid, I mean you literally have what 2-3 chapters dedicated to one game of Hide and Seek, Jesus **** just combine them it's stupid. 2) The status is messy as ****, fix it up with brackets and shit like for different skills, titles, sections etc. 3) It's fucking hard to read, the way you write is too squished, you need to make more paragraphs/Split the already existing paragraphs into more so that it's easy to read rather than a huge block of writing.
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