Review Detail of WinnieLePooh in Reborn in DxD Re-uploaded

It's a good idea, however there are major issues you have to fix. 1) The chapters are so fucking short it's stupid, I mean you literally have what 2-3 chapters dedicated to one game of Hide and Seek, Jesus **** just combine them it's stupid. 2) The status is messy as ****, fix it up with brackets and shit like for different skills, titles, sections etc. 3) It's fucking hard to read, the way you write is too squished, you need to make more paragraphs/Split the already existing paragraphs into more so that it's easy to read rather than a huge block of writing.