Overlord: Ancient one

It has potential if you change it, right now it's average You can improve it by Remove first chapter, it's so bad Remove filler or too much info dump Remove wishes or system, give his a telent, bloodline ability or skill If you want him to have tensura skill then say he died in tensura and reincarned in overlord Raphael skill is too op, just give him 3rd rank analysis skill or apraisal skill Don't make it into mmo game simple reincarnation Make the story simple, believable, logical It's not shown where the location is The leveling part is boring, the system is not explained enough His goals for leveling or objective is not clear The time skip seems very random, why bother having him level up just to skip and make him fight the strongest monster? And he kill the death knight easily, how? How the character looks Make him smart Include other characters Explain his character background, past, goals... The paragraphs are too big, split them Fix grammar Don't include emoojis

It's pretty good so far specialty since the story is slow paced also i just wanna ask if there's gonna be a second reincarnated person in the story i just wanna ask since i don't want to be disappointed like the other fanfic that I've read , if there is an another reincarnated person i'mma be this guy in the picture, one reader ain't much to lose but i still want to announced it

Look bruh, the story isn’t bad if you don’t understand overlord lore but if you do this story sucks, there is so much wrong with it that it sucks. Besides that the mc is so one dimensional with no depth. Along with that the way the story is progressing is atrocious. read if you want but it’s no for me, bless up fool

This is the longest prologue I have ever seen ,32 and still counting.send him to the new world already no one cares about the game

As a shameless person l let myself be honoured to give a 5-star rating to my fanfiction.

hmm... Let's go! incredible potential 5x☆ A very engaging and enjoyable development, nothing too aggressive or overly passive. interaction to the original world and AU in a wonderful way! development... so far I just fell in love with the MC type and the way the story is directed, without dumping information, but very clear at the same time. again immense potential and I look forward to the future of this new world / perspective / life. who can tell me and build. (☆☆☆☆☆)<Stars, for your work so far. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

If you find this Fanfic good, then I have a better recommendation for you guys. Try reading Overlord: The Origin. It a fanfic that where most of the idea of this fanfic came from. My author guy here butchered some parts of it and pasted it here, things like fight, loots, and even events are got copied from it.

honestly, this has the potential to be a great read, but I just couldn't bring myself to read further with how many writing errors there are in almost every other paragraph, the writing quality is just not this fic's strong point, not the worst mind you, it is still readable, and am sure after a while of writing the author will eventually improve but right now I just can't enjoy this. best of luck

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Idk why rating is so high..ive seen alot of the lower ratings be deleted so that maybe why..not close to 5 stars..its 4 months and its 30 chapters only. Chapters only 1 k if that. A lot of details get left out because it be so bad to have more than 1k words lool. Its q ok story but you read ot and forget it just as quickly.

Good start. Keep it up author!

I, who read the Overlord LN, find this fic disgusting. Although the main idea is good, I suggest deleting this completely, reading the Overlord and DxD LN, and then creating something readable.

This is just a reskinned Chaotic Good... some of these chapters are the exact same but with Arthur you didnt even change the In Game Name. The Caloric Stone was like 90% the same so none of this is original

I will say that I enjoyed reading this and can't wait for more chapters. And for the people who said that it doesn't match that well with Overlord lore, it doesn't matter. The Overlord starts when he gets transported to the new world not in the game. Though we see the game as a flashback every now and then the acutual storyline starts in the new world. So in my opinion the story can be anything before the new world.

I honestly don't see why the MC still had to follow the original protagonist. As a fanfic, couldn't he have created his own guild? plus, he has the ability to create avatars.

From the looks of it, the author does not read reviews but I am going to put mine here anyways. Frankly, I enjoyed the story but there are a few problems that I have with it. As for the writing quality it was ok. There were a few grammar mistakes and it felt really drawn out at some points. I am giving update stability a 1 because it is SLOW!! I mean it has been 5 months since the first chapter and we have only just now gotten to the New World. The author plans to take this story to DXD at some point but with the current updates, that will literally take close to a year. That is ridiculous and I think if the author wants more support and traction for this story then he needs to update it more frequently. I am giving the story development a 4 because I like the direction that it is going. Again however is it is really slow and that does not pair well with the infrequent updates. Character design is a 3 because the author was "inspired" by a few other fan fictions World Background is a 5 because the world was really fleshed out. Overall, the story is decent. However the author needs to update the story more often because the short chapters plus infrequent updates do not make for a good combination.

Just another overlord novel with a psychotic evil mc that gains power and forgets his morals.

This is just a dude playing a video game in fanfiction form. I mean, I lost interest in it so fast. I could be doing this instead of reading about it.

Need more chapters I also gave you a total for 4 power stones so hand it over

I think it's starring off really good (22 chapters in) just wished it updates faster.