EvilBlueCrystal

Subaru could still give a vague warning about an assassin to convince Emilia to stay away from the loot house—even without revealing the source of his knowledge. Puck would recognize that he's serious and also telling the truth and choose to avoid going there as his active time nears its end (he only remains active during the day), which would otherwise leave Emilia without magical protection. If Subaru follows the same plan as before—arriving at the loot house early, buying the insignia, and asking Rom to take Felt and leave—they would avoid encountering Elsa, and everyone would survive. Emilia wouldn’t be disqualified even if Subaru avoids Elsa, since he can still return the insignia that proves her candidacy. What you are arguing has no logic supporting it.

That just means the story makes even less sense. - Elsa walks past Subaru. At this point, he should’ve run away since he doesn’t want to die. - She ignores him because, to her, he’s just some random civilian. - Then she finds out Emilia is the owner of the insignia she’s on her way to buy—so obviously, she’d want to kill her. - While Elsa and Emilia are talking, Subaru decides to run off. - But then Elsa, who should’ve immediately attacked Emilia, just lets her go and targets Subaru instead? - Subaru has enough time to hear her footsteps, turn around, pull out his daggers, and react to her attack? - If he could do all that and dodge her strikes—even if they were suppressed—then clearly he had the speed and reflexes to just run away earlier. And if he figured out a working plan in that loop, why didn’t he just reuse it next time and avoid Elsa altogether? - But nah, the author clearly wants to kill him off every chapter just to waste your time with nonsense and turn him into some loser even worse than the original Subaru—someone who doesn’t improve or learn from his mistakes—while every female character falls for him instantly like knockoff xianxia love interests who lose all brain cells the second they meet the MC. The rest of the cast are just gender-bent projections of the author’s fantasies, and the dialogue is so cringey it feels like it was written by a kid. But hey, there’s always a crowd of people ready to eat up mid stories. This “author” (and I use that word loosely, since the AI basically writes it for him) should never be allowed to cook again.

It's good. You should read it. Mc isn't stupid but is cautious. He has some kind of gacha system, and he's already strong at the start. For example, he could defeat the eels at the first test if he wanted to, before being stopped by Yuri. The author knows the story and took inspiration from novels like LotM, like spirituality cultivation and rules like 'do not pry into the mysteries of God' and 'do not look directly at God.' Chapters are long too, and the writing style is good. But not enough chapters so far, so I can't say anything more. Just keep writing and don't drop it.

If you join my discord, whose link is in the description of my fanfics, I can send you my fanfic beginning to copy, which is similarly written to yours but really only 2 chapters ahead because I haven't released it yet, and the explanation of the abilities and history of Baam. As for ideas, just use the manga as a reference, but write it in your own way and add some extra scenes. For the system, I would go with a mission system that also records and shows the level of his abilities. I just finished reading it and don't have any criticism; it's already good, just keep writing more.

This story isn’t terrible, but it’s overrated and nowhere near "peak" in execution, character depth, or action. The writing is below average, overly drawn out for drama, and the "framed as a villain" revenge plot feels forced. The first plotline drags across 11 chapters and 20k+ words when 5k would’ve sufficed without AI-like filler. The first chapter introduction alone is three chapters long just to establish that the MC has completed the Sukuna template and is being accused of killing his family. Followed by one where his girlfriend finds out he’s a villain, cries, and he just stands there letting her hit him. Another of media coverage and UA students reacting and hating him. Then he kidnaps some random villain and effortlessly dismantles All for One’s empire, but the MC doesn’t even gather evidence to expose All for One’s manipulation and try to prove his innocence. This is followed by three fight chapters, and to top it off, the final two chapters are just filler aftermath.

There are some obvious grammar mistakes, but the main issue is that it doesn’t really have a clear premise. So far, it’s just schoolgirls arguing, and it looks like it’ll stick to a school-friendship setting. There’s no sense of timeline, no background info, and it’s not clear who the main character is. That kind of story probably won’t be popular since there’s no real hook—no reincarnation, no crossover, no cheat, no system—and it’s set in the Madoka verse, which isn’t all that well-known.

They sent the MC instead, not the same character

It's meant to say six paths

The plot creative enough, it is the same as the manga, Mc acquires everything he desires easily. He is reincarnated into the world he wants to when he says so, becomes the same person as the original with no past of his own, follows the same training, gets the same system and abilities, takes the same path, and goes to the same dungeons. He has easy time leveling, in one chapter he reaches level 30 with little effort. He acts like a chuuni laughing when he kills a monster. He has no original abilities, but has overused skills like Gluttony that won't have any use and play any role.