So in beginning it said journey was 16 on that world and now all of a sudden it's normal to be 10. Makes zero sense

Boring and kinda ruining Mc

Man I'll hate it if squirter and bulbasaur stay unevolved. Such a waste

Seems forced and made Mc seem idiot for having ravens and animals to warg and still didn't know they planned to kill her.

Why keep stretching things out so much. Feels like more and more padding and stretching happening in this story

Worthless filler

Why was one of the names Amelia bones and slytherin ???

Sounds like the most boring looking wand ever. Took 3 seconds to come up with that look. Lame tbh

So cliche and boring af. Ruined whole story lol pathetic man.took 2 seconds to come up with that

What a waste of time

The nonstop monologue filler is annoying.

It is written well. The grammar and paragraph structure is well done. Chapters are way too short and makes things stretch out way to much to get done. Main issue is Mc is instantly made out to be a naive idiot. Sells phone for 10million valid and buys equipment before even getting to main city for 9 million. His equipment worth luke 30k valis.. it's very cliche and honestly makes Mc boring and cliche afjust ruins him alot tbh

So Mc is naive idiot. Great.... a good choice of mc...not. lame af

8 chapters of worthless stretched out prologue then 3 of actual story. If Mc had to shyt it take 6 chapters for it to complete. Author just wanted to milk easy chapters for word word count and upload rank.

He is just lazy and wants easy mode upload

One of the lamest and most forced chapters I've read in long time

If you want a real life cyberpunk but with system then this might be for you but it has too many game elements sadly to be good. Gamer inventory and hud and all that shyt. Made Mc lame default male version look. The lack of originality harmed this alot

Wish his look was more unique. Seems lazy af to just do default male V

Doesn't seem that interesting then sadly. Even if a act he acting same as Canon so what's the point. Idk just seems bland that way

So all these changes to mc and you still.copy and paste his interaction with Harry and Ron. What a let down.