Pilotfranco

lol I love when people learn new big words cause you can tell in the way they speak, they’ll always find a way to throw it in to sounds smarter.

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The fic is shit, the writing quality is immature, the mc is shallow in depth and has a savior complex all while not while to change the cannon plot line, the story development is buns, there is not development of the mc he just get his powers and stays powerful. Read it if you want, I’m just stating my opinion of it.

Shit is ass, how did you revise it and still fuck it up this bad. The author allocates stats 5 time for the same levels ie when he leveled from 1 to 3. He then changes it and gives a soft cap. The mc has no personality he has an op system in comparison the this world and he acts like an early show Glenn. Be world building is shit too. So basicly not only can’t you write a mc but you can’t follow your own novel.

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Force doesn’t work based on weight it’s about will, you can lift what you believe you can. Like early Luke lifting the fighter or Vader holding the ship in orbit or star killer dragging the star destroyer out of orbit or later Luke manipulating a black hole itself

thanks for the chapter

finally, been waiting for this

It’s alright I guess, it’s just that it’s missing so much to be considered good. The mc doesn’t have much personality nor do any other character. The development for relationships is rushed with lacking plot. The actual plot isn’t bad again it’s just missing things. Im not going to continue reading it but I wouldn’t dissuade anyone from trying it.