Illusionniste
Wow, this was really different from the other book that you were writing. This is more formal and direct to the point. I also find that there were fewer errors here than on the other. The information here was a little hard to process with all the terms so I hope they would be discussed and had some light shed upon them individually as all the other gods were also interesting! The world background was really detailed and the story moved in a good pace. The end of the chapter 6 was really exciting as FL was finally awake and out of her cave! đ±
Writing quality is good. The paragraphs were lengthy and detailed. Readers usually skim the paragraphs so I'd suggest that you can divide a lengthy paragraph in half and provide spacing after each para as that looks better? It's just a suggestion. I did see slight grammatical errors, mostly typos that might have been overlooked. Also, there are 2 errors in the synopsis. You should review it once. Story's pace is good. You have thoroughly researched before writing the story. That's a plus for me. There are sooooo many characters and each of them are well described. Good job! World background has been expanded quite well. I have no complaints at all. Keep writing, author!
I enjoyed this story so much. Iâm speechless. The way this story was told was so original. I highly recommend it to everyone. Iâm sure you do not want to put it down, not even for a minute. -The writing,synopsis, and first chapter are all amazing! There isn't anything to criticize, this story is amazing!
Intricate and very elaborate in terms of world building, the very Gods themselves in this story are enough to entice the curious minds of readers such as mine. Although the explanatory introduction was intriguing, it could stray readers away because of the enormous info-dumps. But I love the veracity in which you develop and attract readers. Overall, would definitely read. Good work author.
Love the story. So far, all of the things that happened are intriguing and make me want to read more. Story development, character design, world background are all impeccable, having the charm I really enjoyed. I could imagine the looks of every character, and I enjoyed it. The only thing I have problem with is the author's grammar. Find an editor fix those trivialities. Although it's not that big, it can be bothersome. Anyway, continue writing this as much as you want or can, because you have a great piece in your hands.
I would like to say author has a good understanding about gods and their power.. I like this prince.. Small suggestion take it positively there are some grammar mistakes and paragraphs are sometimes lengthier than required Keep it short so that readers can able to give comments on it.. Over all its a nice story I hope you will give more to the readers