Reviews of Naruto: New life
Naruto: New life
Abdou944
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I'll tell u what I didnt like.... -MC's personality....its bland and also forced as fk..this dude cares about someone just like that..the fk? why? He is in a new world, first priority should be himself not anyone else [and if u say that both the people have similar lives, that BS,,,MC a kid...far worse] And he just died and isekaied, why would care about someone else? -and the interactions..this made me dropped....C3...damn man, the OG kyuubi was willing to manipulate a kid to get his vengeance..he hates humanity..he only liked them towards the end of naruto and that was mainly cause it was because of naruto...here its 4 yrs it spend with naruto....my ass it'll accept a hug from naruto like that....u forced this interaction. -genderbend.....atleast change the name dont force **** man..thats all I can say
this novel has the right makings to be absolute trash. your writing leaves a lot to be desired. for food naruto can ask the hokage to go shopping with him once a week. the kurama brainwashing thing, well good luck in trying to "brainwash" a multiple thousand year old entity that happens to be a fox demon who are known to be cunning.just make kurama female from the get go and dont pull any crap out of your ass to succeed in brainwashing her. pay more attention to the small things. you say he does things but not how, you dont describe the scenes properly. you say he stole food bc they overcharged him but it reads like a diary entry. describe the scene how naruto walks into a store only to get kikcked out or overcharged, the mental monologue in which he decides if he gets kicked out and beaten anyway then he might as well steal his food, him getting chased through the streets while stuffing himself with the stolen food, getting cought and beaten ect. pay more attention to yout grammar, the typos. *grow**grow*? what is that? is he physically growing right now *growl**growl* ok he must be hungry. pay more attention to detail. naruto's personality is a mess. i have no grip in what personality he has. i think you are going for some kind of anti hero or something. you could have used the food situation to develop his character into a certain direction. he gets kicked out of every store, goes hungry for a couple days until he makes the decision to steal food and ensure his survival, this was a golden oppotunity to turn a normal person into someone that did what needed to be done to survive(stealing, robbing even murder when he is attacked by civillian can be explained when he lives by the "rules of the jungle" for a couple months) i'll stop here right now, trying not to rant. keep in mind this is only one chapter and its this bad already. don't believe in the 5 star comments they just want you to keep going to get to a smut scene. rating: 2.0 except for update stability which i dont know at 15 chapters everything else needs loads of work
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This has a lot of trip ups in terms of grammar but I can overlook that because the story is awesome and totally hilarious. Plus the dojutsu isn’t op its just a mental attack protection skill with the observe skill from the gamer but not limited by levels or anything. I love yandere Hinata and thirsty Sakura too, keep up the good work!
The story is to forced and the mc is just accepts people like that i’m sorry but if someone burns me qith a fucking fireball I ain’t gonna date ‘em. What do you mean you saved my little brother i’m sorry but you’re littlte brother was beating a girls while she wasnt fighting back for no reason and the only thing you care about is he didnt get in trouble?
