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AvatarLOK23mthPostedIt is a pretty fun read. There are a lot of grammar mistakes. I feel like by just improving on them, this fanfic will grow. I like the power set and while mc is powerful, he isn't yet op, although it might feel like it. Honestly, I wish you would focus a bit on background and world-building because we still haven't met tony stark even though he invested in mcs company and the mc is a potts. Also, what happened to the hydra spy that is his maid or something(I forgot her position)? Overall its a fun story and its a fanfic so...five stars
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- AvatarLOK23mthCommentedCh 41 A King VS A Spear Boy Part 1
- AvatarLOK24mthReplied to AenarionVoldigoad
He's not childish. He just doesn't care. Nothing can really harm him so why should he? If he gets stabbed, he heals and he can practically get ifinitely stronger through a multitude of ways. At that point I would do what Saitama does and look for a real fight or try and fix things because I know that I can't die. But, we are allowed to have different opinions and perspectives and so we're probably both somewhat right though, I like my opinion more.
"It's so that you don't let yourself get stabbed like a moron again." That was rich coming from her considering the kind of shit her comic book version did. Not that I would call her out on it since that would cause her to ask some uncomfortable questions. Still, that left me at the very question that started it all. - AvatarLOK24mthReplied to Shinxbi
To awaken the mangekyou, you have to kill the person closest to you. People can lose people but, the mangekyou is hatred itself. Madara got it when he killed his brother. For Sasuke, it was the same. It is not bloodline purity, it is pure unadultered hate and malice.(Sorry for my spelling.)
This theory of his was supported as no one wanted a jinchuriki/tailed beast getting controlled even if there was no one there who could possibly do that. Yoriichi just scoffed at that and thought only if they knew the future. - AvatarLOK24mthPosted
This is fun. I like all the science talk and how while a bit inflate most of it is true. Also the character is fun. My biggest problem is just a problem that most translations have which is that you can tell its a translation with how the english is being used. I wouldn't even call that a problem at all. Good luck author.
- AvatarLOK24mthCommentedCh 18 Capitulo 17
- AvatarLOK26mthReplied to Lucifer09
- AvatarLOK26mthCommentedCh 9 chapter 9 : Sadness and regret
- AvatarLOK26mthReplied to p3d0_Man
And? There were no rules why didn’t rias do the same? She could have told issei to do that in the fight. It would have worked. She just didn’t think.
But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul. - AvatarLOK26mthReplied to p3d0_Man
Issei also beat Riser without Juggernaut drive.
But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul. - AvatarLOK26mthReplied to
Bro did you see how strong Rias and her peerage became in less than a year of actual train. Kiba's potential, Akeno's potential, Gasper's potential, Koneko's potential. They are all overpowered as fuck. They never needed Issei to win plus when rias goes crazy she shows why the power of destruction is so potent. Literally they have sirzechs, grayfia, gremory family connections all of of which could have helped with their training. I mean Riser should have lost if Rias was taking shit seriously. I mean even Sairaorg with no actual power of his own other than what he got by training or journeying could be Riser without his sacred gear. You are talking crap bro. Rias isn't a crybaby. She is a nice person. It is just that she was spoiled. I mean Sirzechs and his crew could all train them. Rias literally has so many overpowered peerage members that it is crazy.
But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul. - AvatarLOK26mthPosted
- AvatarLOK26mthReplied to CruelRealitySimilarly, adding the finishing touch he elongated his Excalibur to the maximum length a human can have in Naruto verse which was close to 9 Inches in its all-out form.
- AvatarLOK26mthCommentedCh 6 Chapter 06