Venerable_Linfeng
You every day Chinese novel where everyone has a iq of 10 nothing different or interesting same plot as every other novel, young masters at every corner face slapping revenge from older brother father etc. You know the tipical **** im disappointed that you couldn't change even a bit im more suprised you used modern day time but used the word slave in dialogs it's like you copy pasting the most iconic cultivation young masters line???๐ im disappointed this could be a lot more then this.
So far good bro! Modern Timeline, have system, cultivator, martial art, romance or maybe you wanna go harem? Remind me Returning from the immortal world, but far from it cause mc got no system and the ending kinda suck there I just hope you dont end up like all mainstream ff. And add more comedy or something like face slapping? Keep it up, give us more chap please lol
The story is just...bland. No one has any character to them, they are cardboard cutouts at best. The world is seemingly the same as ours so it isn't interesting. The plot and events are all very cliche and normal. I tried a few times to get through more chapters to see if there was something better behind this but it is just more of the same. There isn't anything terrible about this story. It is readable just boring.
Good start, good premise. The only problem is that your usage of the past tense is wrong, and i think you have this misconception that whenever something is in 3rd person perspective, everything will be written in past tense. That is not entirely correct. Anyway, i love the character development and the world building. Perhaps, spice up the story with some unexpected events. Good luck!
Excellent grammar, interesting story with a lot of potential. Would be interested in the romance part, but I have no complaints so far................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................