Review Detail of Condemned in My WeChat Got a Plug-In (On Hiatus)

Good start, good premise. The only problem is that your usage of the past tense is wrong, and i think you have this misconception that whenever something is in 3rd person perspective, everything will be written in past tense. That is not entirely correct. Anyway, i love the character development and the world building. Perhaps, spice up the story with some unexpected events. Good luck!