Reviews of HP: What would you do if you were Snape in his time at Hogwarts?

To clarify doubts, this fanfic is not tragic or anything like that, only the first chapters show tragedy since Snape's past is explained, but once those chapters pass it will not continue to be a tragic story. I promise Snape's life will start to look up for the better in no time, just be a little patient. One other thing, Snape's appearance is going to change over time, but for now he's not a good looking guy at all.

My only problem with the ff is that the author drags parts of the of the story on to the point of repeating himself over and over again. I understand if you need filler but if you make the story feel so monotonous, it doest feel like a well read book. It happens so often I started skipping the endings of paragraphs or if I saw skimmed ahead a little and saw that it was also I repeat I just flat out skipped the paragraph. To put simply, until the ff isn't a monotonous repeat of itself I won't advise people to read it unless your into that type of stuff. Lastly the conversations could use a little work, again it feels as if everyone is a robot.

Fanfic very good story. I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story.[img=recommend]

The story is good but the main thing ruining the story is that the author is constantly and I mean at every single sentence and paragraph saying the exact same thing 3-4 times repeatedly. It’s getting really annoying and I’m having to skip around half of the paragraph to read since it’s just a repeat of the thing it said before but worded slightly diffrently .

I have seen way worse ffs with far better ratings! so you get 5 stars. I think this FF has a lot of potential and I really want to see it continued. I like how Snape still cares for the people and what has happened between them in the past. It makes it feel like we’re still reading about a Severus who had a second life, rather than a Severus who was just replaced and doesn’t care. He has a lot of different relationships and his story is a tragic one and that makes it interesting. Though I get what some people are saying. Try to convey his feelings through actions more than repeating it with his inner monologue in the future... I hope the Summer Arc isn’t too long, I want to see Snape back in Hogwarts cuz I think the interaction with him and the marauders was your best chapter so far. Keep writing!

The fanfic is really GREAT, i loved the drama, the way that Severus is realizing that he himself is his worst enemy. Because has so much potential but he let waist because of his hatred (even i don't blame him because if i was him, i would just ask for transfer to another school very far away from gryffindor, lily, dumbledore and death eaters to live a quiet and happy life and never return to england, wich would be ease with Snape intelligence)

this fanfiction is really awesome. the first 2/3 chapters are a bit drama queen but after that the story really begins. the story is very original for a "what if Severus Snape at Hogwarts" like other fanfiction. I have enormous hope for this story which exploits things that are little studied. I recommend this story to everyone

Your fan fiction is amazing and a masterpiece. The start is quite difficult to read and Snape is like 10 chapters obsessed with Lilly. (4.4 Stars)

the beginning is very good but I do not advise reading this fanfiction to people who do not like the tragedy or suffering of the characters and so everything is cool ..................^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

What can i say it is a masterpiece. The character development and magical world exploration is beyond amazing. ♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆

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I really love the mood of that story ! Even if snape's more snape that the other soul (and i thinck that's sad), he don't see the world in global or use he's knowledge of the future that much, but that can be usefull to creat intrigue and other stuff, then it's ok like that to.

Don't stop your book. This story is pretty good. I'm happy that there is a fusion between personalities of Snape and the reincarnator. I hope you keep how they Snape acts a little dominant, yet equal to the reincarnator for the future of the story.

Interesting Story, I haven't read any Snape focused stories before but I it seems fine with a interesting plot but will Snape be actively fight Voldemort?

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Writing quality three stars, no noticeable misspellings or grammar mistakes, pretty low rating because of so much info dumping and repeatative use of sentences already written in a chapter to other chapters. Story development five stars, good plot with a bit of originality. three star character design, you don't own/created the characters but just borrowing. five star updating stability, pretty stable release of chapters. world background three stars, you Dont own Harry Potter.

God fanfic of HP, amo y odio a los personajes, pero en el buen sentido son creibles de verdas los caracterizas muy bien y creo que es mil veces mejor que todo lo rouling a escrito ultimamente

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