Im more ordinary than ordinary characters in novels.
The story itself is actually really good, my problem is the grammar, all you have to do is proofread and it would be fine. . .
Good book, grammars clean, the characters are done well, each chapter is a good length. My only problem is the predictability of it and sometimes the characters do something out of character and it feels awkward.
God you can't write a single sentence right. Are you using a translator or is this you cause my God is it bad, the character isn't that compelling either he's more annoying than anything. Thanks for ruining another omnitrix story for me, it seems that no one can actually make a decent one except a handful of people.
Good book but 15k word requirement is annoying, usually I'd give you a 1 star but that was actually better than I thought it was going to be, please don't ruin it.
Good translation, good story, only problem is its gets a little slow sometimes but it's also realistic in the fact that he's not doing 100 movies at once and he's making a billion dollars a day, my explanation might be a bit of an overexageration but I've seen numerous showbiz novels kinda snowball into that. Translator you should try to get in contact with the author maybe turn this into an extra bit of cash so you can possibly do more of their works without losing the will to do it endless of course this is purely just a hobby. You said the author has more showbiz novels so maybe you can do his other novels after this is completed or you catch up to his new releases, we just don't have enough quality showbiz novels. Either way quality work 10 outta 10, good on both of you. Good luck in your endeavors.
It's definitely one of the best naruto fanfics I've read in the past 6 months, theirs not really anything I can say bad about this and don't listen to commentators endless they actually say something helpful not because they want something. Besides their not gonna stop so I hope your not gonna drop.
I can't find anything original about it so I'm out, plus its annoying seeing you talk in past tense so much,not to mention the dozen other word placements that could've been fixed if you went back and proofread.
My only problem is the parents, I get they said he had to train himself but to completely disappear feels a little weird and I wish he could have more transformations but its understandable to have it fixed to 6 so it's not that big of a deal, besides that everything else is really good. Good luck and hope you don't drop.
It's slow, the story itself is boring, mc has 70 yrs of experience and yet he's a retard, grammar is annoying, comedic side of the story feels more annoying than funny after awhile, systems stupid, it has potential but that's the only good thing about it.