maverick_maya
Hey I came across your novel, it's really nice and something unique, the story is really Captivating, I finished all the chapters in one sitting and really wanna know what happens next, what juns will do now? How Adrian and Elena will reunite? Waiting for lots of chapters to know this interesting story furtherđ„șđ
I've been reading up until chapter twenty or so. I really like the beginning of the story, it feels very clear in direction. Elena is an intriguing character and it's interesting to see into her life and what happens to her body and consciousness. Transmigration/reincarnation is not a new concept but I like the way you focused on a Russian character becoming a Chinese character. However, I started getting quite confused with all the different place and time skips, and I think when you go through editing you can think from the reader's perspective too. As of now, I think the story needs more work on characterization and story development. I want to be able to focus more on Elena's character but there are a lot of setting and time skips. Overall, enjoying the story and I like Elena's interactions with different characters. The slap chapter tho hahaha
This book is golden. I absolutely loved it. Can't wait to read more. I was totally immersed in the plot that I dint know how long I read. Good writing and the characters are really lovable. I'm still waiting to see how Elena will deal with whoever was doing the villainous things. Absolutely great book!
A great twist on a classic trope. I don't think I've ever seen a reincarnation story that happens quite like this. The dynamic between life continuing yet somehow disconnected. It's interesting, but quite difficult to follow. I think what keeps it back the most is that multiple characters speak in the same paragraph. Spacing out conversations will make it clearer who is speaking and will make it easier for readers to follow along. A great story regardless! I look forward to its continuation!
When I was reading I realized how your title suited the story. I also liked your cover. And, most important I'm really liking your story. Apart from some typos, the story is really attracting me. The way you are leading it is also good. And, I'm waiting for how you'd reveal every mystry. [img=recommend] đ
So I am absolutely taken with this story. The concept is a wonderful change to what you typically see nowadays and the character's personalities stand out from one another instead of bleeding together. There are some grammar and paragraph structure issues but even still it is something that I want to see more of. Characters with faults, a storyline that is coated with mystery and even a bit of romance; Jun Zixuan just stole my heart! And Jun Bohai is also just the cutest thing!
The concept is there, and I really like the entire story of your novel! And I love your book cover! There are only two things that i'd like to point out. Grammar and the spacing. You should edit the story first thoroughly before publishing it(by using spaces and other sentences that needs editting). In that way, you could show and tell the story to us, readers. An example of that sentence would be this (taken from your novel) "Weren't the questions which were running in her mind because she knew who her brother was, the only thing she knows is that she is supposed to live at all cost now." One tip that I could give you is reading the story out loud! You will see the difference by writing it and narrating it.