VeryVyle
Someone with a passion of reading (and making) fantasy works.
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Of course not, thanks for the input :)
Actually i found the same stumbles as you with the italics, but so far I used a separate line between the paragraph. I don't know if it's any better actually haha.. Maybe an indirect sentence could be a bit better. I think it's just my bias because it felt like a self-inserted comment from a writer and maybe others would not really think that way. Anyway, do you mind to review my book in the near future? I really need some insights as a writer as well. Thank you and keep writing! 😁
Quite a great opener with nice characters and fun chemistry. The dialogues are great and the personalities were varied. I would only point out the use of this kind of (inner monologue?), I hope you can get around with the use of other words but of course you can take my advice as granted. Great job and keep it up! 🙏
What a great start! This book is pleasant to read with really well captured emotions. We are being delved into the protagonist's side, following events after events by their side. Twists are also handled well without breaking the pace, giving a sign of experience by the author. Definitely looking for more contents in this story.