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VeryVyle

VeryVyle

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Someone with a passion of reading (and making) fantasy works.

2021-04-29 JoinedIndonesia
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Reading a passage of nicely written words was mainly the experience I had with this book. Great characterizations, a nice touch of free writing, and passionate storytelling. Nice job!

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    Morphing Iniquity
    Teen · Tailrs ink
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to Nakasuka

    Thank you so much for the review! I will keep on working for the best version possible.

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to Nakasuka

    Of course not, thanks for the input :)

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to VeryVyle

    Actually i found the same stumbles as you with the italics, but so far I used a separate line between the paragraph. I don't know if it's any better actually haha.. Maybe an indirect sentence could be a bit better. I think it's just my bias because it felt like a self-inserted comment from a writer and maybe others would not really think that way. Anyway, do you mind to review my book in the near future? I really need some insights as a writer as well. Thank you and keep writing! 😁

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    Hemmingston
    Teen · Nakasuka
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Quite a great opener with nice characters and fun chemistry. The dialogues are great and the personalities were varied. I would only point out the use of this kind of (inner monologue?), I hope you can get around with the use of other words but of course you can take my advice as granted. Great job and keep it up! 🙏

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    Hemmingston
    Teen · Nakasuka
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to Yonko_master

    Thanks for the time!

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Nice book with crisp details and power system. The characters are well defined and pretty relatable in some cases. Great job and keep up on making great content!

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    Return of the Woodcutter
    Fantasy · YoanRoturier
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Nice start with a great time within the household. Silika is cute and also likable with her personality. You can feel her when she is in trouble Good job and keep it up!

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    My quiet life
    Fantasy · waurpel
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Well done backstory that gives us a clear vision about the world and what to come. If there was anything to fix, maybe it's only the dialogue since the rest is actually fine. Keep up the work and good luck! [img=recommend]

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    Emperor's descendant system
    Fantasy · Yonko_master
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to maverick_maya

    Thanks for the review, the cover is coming!

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to star_dreamer

    Thank you for the review, I'll take that into consideration.

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Nicely done book with interesting characters and starting plot. You might need some fixes on the use of space and dots, but other than that, you are doing well. The story is really heartfelt, and we can feel every occasions as the protagonist would. Keep it up!

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    Find me in your memory
    Fantasy · maverick_maya
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Nice background info and really well written scenes. The story really has a hook and also gripping action that never let your attention go. Keep up the nice work!

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    NPC Code: Red Riding Hood
    Fantasy · kuhaku_sora
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to kuhaku_sora

    Thank you for the honest review! Hope you have a great day!

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Captivating title and descriptions! The protagonist skyla is an interesting person and the story delivered her emotions and sight very well! Looking for more and keep it up.

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    Into Your Blood And Bones
    Fantasy · _Rain
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Replied to Venusean

    Thank you so much!

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    Saltwater Reincarnate
    Fantasy · VeryVyle
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    Really promising start and the family has a nice chemistry you would expect from one. The world is looking unique and one would crave to understand about it more. Keep it up, author! Nice work.

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    RebootedRebooted我爱你
    Fantasy · Venusean
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  • VeryVyle
    VeryVyle2yr
    Posted

    What a great start! This book is pleasant to read with really well captured emotions. We are being delved into the protagonist's side, following events after events by their side. Twists are also handled well without breaking the pace, giving a sign of experience by the author. Definitely looking for more contents in this story.

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    Lovingly together
    Urban · star_dreamer
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