Demoniac

A useful literary review, and I don't want to assume, but I hope this is a useful review, answers one question. Is the work of literature worth reading? It is that question I hope to answer for any potential reader. To quote one of my all time favourite bands, Rush. "Tell me the good news first" That's just what I'll do. The good news is this, the story is amazing. The characters are great and the dialog is nearly, oh so nearly flawless. The imaginative story will draw a reader in. The characters are very well developed in a very short amount of time. It's clear that the author has inhabited this world, he's walked through it. He's talked to the characters and emphasised with them. Even the antagonists have relatable moments. At times, you'll even root for them. In short, the story is good, it's really good, So that's the good news, that leaves the bad. Unfortunately, there is bad. We've established that the story is good, it's sad to say, but that good story is buried beneath less than ideal writing, The author made the bizarre choice to bend and far too often, disregard standard writing conventions. These conventions aren't there to put up a barrier to writing, but rather for the sake of the reader. The disregard of these writing conventions will lead any potential reader to intense confusion. The story can be understood, but only with significant effort of the intended audience. The webnovel does not separate dialog between characters with a new line. A change in scene isn't preceded with a paragraph break. The sentence are too long, appropriate punctuation is not utilised, and tenses are changed on the fly. Why one would use the future tense to describe what happened in the past is beyond me... The prose is far too often muddled. This muddling pulls you out of the story, forcing you to reread what you just read in order to understand the meaning. One of the chief intentions behind webnovels, an intention I'm not a fan of, but have to recognise, is that they are intended to be light reading. Something you can read on your commute, at a bar or at home for accessible entertainment. When the prose forces effort from the reader, that intention is defeated. So, is Demoniac worth reading? My answer is maybe. The story is fantastic, and I'm genuinely excited to see where it could go, I'm excited by the prospect of revelling in vicarious satisfaction as the MC face slaps those who betrayed him. I'm not, however, excited by the prospect of having to trudge through the nigh impenetrable writing. I hope the author polishes this crude gem to reflect the criticism I've laid out. I sincerely look forward to reading an edited version of this and relaying to any potential reader that Demoniac is indisputably worth your time. To the author: I know this review is probably not what you want to hear, but it's honest. I almost didn't write this review at all, but I feel like the changes you can make to this book to make it great is worth the feelings of guilt I'm feeling for potentially inspiring them. Writing Quality: 2/5 Stability of Updates: 5/5 Story development: 3/5 (hampered by the prose) Character Design: 4/5 World Background: 3/5 (hampered by the prose) Overall: 17/25

So first, the story has an interesting start (I'm talking about the prologue. The other one although it said that don't read but yeah I did and it make me dizzy 😂). Second, the characters introductions were clear same with the narratives. Hmmm. The synopsis maybe you could some punctuation marks especially the first paragraph to make it look better. World background is detailed too.

Another review from me! Your novel was captivating, with superb battle scenes that was narrated skillfully, this will become big in the future! The dialogues were realistic and I can hear them say it in my mind. Quite amazing by the way! Hope you find success in the future.

This review may be a bit inaccurate considering I have only read 1 chapter, I apologize. The writing quality is okay, not bad but I feel like the author could read it up for himself out loud before he publishes it, it would improve by a lot.^^ I have to compliment the describing though, it is as if your word library is quite large, and you do well describing feelings and nerves throughout the first chapter. The chapter length could be worked on, the first chapter made me feel like I barely touched the surface of the intro. But I suppose it will be difficult if the author is to keep up with an upload schedule. That was all I wanted to say, I can recommend it, so give it a chance.

A satanic ritual, a demonic possession and a thirst for vengeance seems like a very good trio to keep readers hooked. The story is amazing with a strong protagonist and nice world building.

This is the author of Totally In Love and the username BellsandLexShow on the forum. I want to just give a huge thumbs up to this author!!! I really love how you described the world's background. I was following along with the story. It just overall flowed together I think. Really love how you wrote the story, and the plot as well. I recommend checking this book out if your interested in demonic things. I really found myself interested in the character development of Mazoku, and how you came up with how he should be. Good luck author!!!!

The plot and story line are very interesting. The world building is great and it is described well but what I like the most is that the fight scene is greatly described. Writing quality and style is okay I guess. Updating stability is not a problem.

Hi, fellow of vengeance. I really liked your plot. The synopsis is really great. The characters and their background are too nice. Your story can hook any reader. Highly recommended for fantasy and vengeance. More power to you.

Nice start of the story and really good outline of the plot. Hope author can move forward with his original storyline. Great book although only a few chapter.

The story was like in Japan where there were samurais! The plot was well thought and the narrations were okay. But there has to be editing that needs to take place. If done, then your story will fare well in the future! The story has potential itself and improve your grammar as well as the technique of show don't tell kind of narration. It helps the readers to be immersed in the story! Good luck author!

First of all, the premise is interesting. it's rehashed, yes, but tropes are good no matter how many different ways they are retold. Then, I believe author's going through and editing, thus writing quality is quite good in first few chapters. You can almost tell the divide from where edit happened. Yet, the story thus far is so good you continue. After all, it's not like you can't understand what's being conveyed, and the story indeed makes you look forward to next chapter. .. A job well done.

Its a great and interesting story to read. The author narrates it in an amazing way it's hard to pull back when you're drawn to it, but the only thing I think the author should on is the description of characters(most especially their face)

This was GREAT. The story is well written and I know its kind of Dark but it really is worth reading. I wish for more updates in the future. Kudos!

A novel of great concept along with enticingly tailored plot. The novel has action, strong protagonist, revenge and is dramatically well presented.

This is a very nice story! The description used throughout is great and really emersive! Ocassionally due to some gramatical errors it can be a little tricky to follow, but overall, really enjoyable!

The beginning was really great, actually! You can feel the tension when reading this story, and it really makes me sympathize with Mazoku :') It would be nice to separate the paragraphs a bit more, though. Makes for a smoother reading ;) Good work, author! <3

Love the story concept. I'm a sucker for stories about demons and revenge and this one covers them both. One of the top fixes is definitely breaking up the paragraphs/formatting. There were several spots where they were talking back and forth and it was in one paragraph. Some kind of transition would be helpful when switching from one character to another. That being said, once I started reading I found I couldn't stop. The story and plot progression was immersive even with all the formatting and grammar issues. Keep up the good work!

A fine read, in my opinion, the writing style of this novel is quite exquisite! The character design is also nice! The world background is very good. Overall, it's definitely an interesting read. I hope you have a great journey of being an author.

The premise is very promising, and certainly delivers throughout futher chapters. The sentence structure feels a tad off, and it would be a pitty if it were to repel future readers from reading the story. Overall, I deem the story to be a bit of a rough draft of what it could be. I hope you keep practicing, so that all of us might read it in the future.

Interesting plot. I don't usually read action and adventure, but this one is really impressive. The writing flow is good. Good work author! Added to my library.

Your book gives me that Himura Kenshin vibe, it's refreshing to read a book that involves sword fighting and such. It's depicted well and describe down to its detail. I like that. One thing though. please consider separating paragraphs eh? There maybe others like me who suck at small letters and reading can be a bit confusing with the big chunky paragraph. But overall, it's good. Great job author!