Becoming King of the Wildling's in GOT

Interesting premise, flawed execution. The story is read more like a dairy than an actual tale/story. Scarce dialogue and the dialogue that is there good use some work, it comes off as monotone and without flavor of the characters personality. Of which the MC doesn't really have one. In general the sentence structure and the flow of the story is bland and robotic. The main issue here though is that the Author needs to take it slow, the pace of the story is off, too many time skips, and not enough interaction with the world. Story does nothing at all to expand on the culture of the free folk or the personalities of the characters within. It all seems superficial. Plus you have a god that comes out of no where after already giving three wishes and helps the MC out with problems the author should have written more in detail about but no, solutions come from a dream and a paragraph summary.

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Hoped to find a decent GOT story but im very disappointed . the wishes are extremely bad and he shouldve chosen much better abilities if he thought and activated his brain for a few seconds. Then there is the part when the author cant decide if the mc is 6 or 8 years old at the start. there is the scene he suddenly he finds free folk children everywhere roaming free in one of the most harsh environments in planetos to bring into his clan. author use the excuse that mc was in the military for every unreasonable and every part he cant describe or explain, the fact that he was enlisted dosent means hes an expert in hand to hand combat. mc somehow manage to defeat a dire wolf with the body of an exhausted malnourished six years old kid and a makeshift blade... the dialogue between characters sounds like a repeating NPC quests and lines and their emotions are very poorly described, until where i reached (chapter 8) everything is extremely unrealistic like the fact he managed to sail from frostfang to essos with a makeshift raft and without supplies. sorry i can't take any of that seriously not my thing at all. i hope this review is helpful for my fellow GOT fans.

fan of GoT but this story falls short. the wishes are bad, very restricted too. Then there is a 6 year old man child who thinks he could beat adults with such a body, his words and actions contradict itself starting from the first poorly written chapter. Then suddenly he finds free folk children everywhere roaming free to bring into his clan. Sorry can't take any of that serious. if the rest of the story is like the first two chapters then you'll be in for a wild ride. not my thing at all. it's a fanfic, I get it, but this is too fake, no immersion with nothing to relate to because its all so outlandish.

It is an interesting concept so far and has a good pacing with not developing too fast or too slowly. I don't like the fact that there could be more than 1 lover but there have not been enough chapters to actually tell if it is going to happen. Other than that it is all good for me.

La idea en si esta bien. Pero el desarrollo de la historia es malo. 0.no hagas que el protagonista haga todo(un barco, un refugio, un Torreón de la nada) 1.Le diste magia al protagonista pero no hace nada que valga la pena. Algunos ejemplos serian clarividencia(para encontrar hierro, oro), herreria(tiene magia de fuego y podria mezclar metales), druida o alquimista(buscar plantas que crezcan bien en el frio). 2. Los saltos en el tiempo no tienen sentido para que lo rencarnar a los 6 años si en 3 capitulos ya esta en 17 año. 3.los sueños o sugerencias de dios son muy convenientes. 4.el viaje a essos no desarrolla ni un poquito la historia para mejor. 5. La magia en juego de tronos tiene un costo. Yo te recomendaría que veas algun juego de rol como mount and blade warban(por las armas) o skyrim (por la magia) O incluso ver videos en youtube para inspirarse.

Couldn’t get past the second chapter, every other paragraph is, “I’m a soldier, I was trained for this.” Or about training he was given that no troops but special forces get. To cringe and is relaying way to heavily on the whole ‘trained soldier’.

It's an interesting premise but in my opinion poorly executed. The wishes are frankly horrible as if regeneration is what you wanted you could've wished for the powers of a character with regeneration i.e Wolverine, the devil fruit is frankly pointless and wasteful, as is the magic since its technically two wishes in one.

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The premise is good.. And the story took a different route than what I was expecting but still it is good so far. ............... .......mmm.....

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welcome back author I'm going to start from the 1st chapter again letssss gooooooo

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To be honest after reading the story I'm very disappointed there was a lot of potential that went to waste what are you talking about?................................................................................. it's Drop

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There is nothing about this story that is bad really, but there is nothing that makes it stand out amongst GOT fanfictions besides the fact that, well, he starts out beyond the wall and becomes king of the free folk. Which I guess makes it somewhat original compared to others.

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