Interesting premise, flawed execution. The story is read more like a dairy than an actual tale/story. Scarce dialogue and the dialogue that is there good use some work, it comes off as monotone and without flavor of the characters personality. Of which the MC doesn't really have one. In general the sentence structure and the flow of the story is bland and robotic. The main issue here though is that the Author needs to take it slow, the pace of the story is off, too many time skips, and not enough interaction with the world. Story does nothing at all to expand on the culture of the free folk or the personalities of the characters within. It all seems superficial. Plus you have a god that comes out of no where after already giving three wishes and helps the MC out with problems the author should have written more in detail about but no, solutions come from a dream and a paragraph summary.
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I agree. Everytime the MC faces some sort of a problem, MC gets a plot armor to deal with it in the same chapter the problem was presented. Other characters think the same, Northern Lords all think like this ‘Wilding weak, Let’s just attack’
