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Darktokio
DarktokioLv42yr
2022-11-16 17:10

La idea en si esta bien. Pero el desarrollo de la historia es malo. 0.no hagas que el protagonista haga todo(un barco, un refugio, un Torreón de la nada) 1.Le diste magia al protagonista pero no hace nada que valga la pena. Algunos ejemplos serian clarividencia(para encontrar hierro, oro), herreria(tiene magia de fuego y podria mezclar metales), druida o alquimista(buscar plantas que crezcan bien en el frio). 2. Los saltos en el tiempo no tienen sentido para que lo rencarnar a los 6 años si en 3 capitulos ya esta en 17 año. 3.los sueños o sugerencias de dios son muy convenientes. 4.el viaje a essos no desarrolla ni un poquito la historia para mejor. 5. La magia en juego de tronos tiene un costo. Yo te recomendaría que veas algun juego de rol como mount and blade warban(por las armas) o skyrim (por la magia) O incluso ver videos en youtube para inspirarse.

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Lucifer20
Lucifer20Lv4

Wh at

taticus
taticusLv5

Esta historia es muy contradictoria y descuidada.

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