Interesting premise, flawed execution. The story is read more like a dairy than an actual tale/story. Scarce dialogue and the dialogue that is there good use some work, it comes off as monotone and without flavor of the characters personality. Of which the MC doesn't really have one. In general the sentence structure and the flow of the story is bland and robotic. The main issue here though is that the Author needs to take it slow, the pace of the story is off, too many time skips, and not enough interaction with the world. Story does nothing at all to expand on the culture of the free folk or the personalities of the characters within. It all seems superficial. Plus you have a god that comes out of no where after already giving three wishes and helps the MC out with problems the author should have written more in detail about but no, solutions come from a dream and a paragraph summary.

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fan of GoT but this story falls short. the wishes are bad, very restricted too. Then there is a 6 year old man child who thinks he could beat adults with such a body, his words and actions contradict itself starting from the first poorly written chapter. Then suddenly he finds free folk children everywhere roaming free to bring into his clan. Sorry can't take any of that serious. if the rest of the story is like the first two chapters then you'll be in for a wild ride. not my thing at all. it's a fanfic, I get it, but this is too fake, no immersion with nothing to relate to because its all so outlandish.

It is an interesting concept so far and has a good pacing with not developing too fast or too slowly. I don't like the fact that there could be more than 1 lover but there have not been enough chapters to actually tell if it is going to happen. Other than that it is all good for me.

La idea en si esta bien. Pero el desarrollo de la historia es malo. 0.no hagas que el protagonista haga todo(un barco, un refugio, un Torreón de la nada) 1.Le diste magia al protagonista pero no hace nada que valga la pena. Algunos ejemplos serian clarividencia(para encontrar hierro, oro), herreria(tiene magia de fuego y podria mezclar metales), druida o alquimista(buscar plantas que crezcan bien en el frio). 2. Los saltos en el tiempo no tienen sentido para que lo rencarnar a los 6 años si en 3 capitulos ya esta en 17 año. 3.los sueños o sugerencias de dios son muy convenientes. 4.el viaje a essos no desarrolla ni un poquito la historia para mejor. 5. La magia en juego de tronos tiene un costo. Yo te recomendaría que veas algun juego de rol como mount and blade warban(por las armas) o skyrim (por la magia) O incluso ver videos en youtube para inspirarse.

Couldn’t get past the second chapter, every other paragraph is, “I’m a soldier, I was trained for this.” Or about training he was given that no troops but special forces get. To cringe and is relaying way to heavily on the whole ‘trained soldier’.

It's an interesting premise but in my opinion poorly executed. The wishes are frankly horrible as if regeneration is what you wanted you could've wished for the powers of a character with regeneration i.e Wolverine, the devil fruit is frankly pointless and wasteful, as is the magic since its technically two wishes in one.

what is the power of Mc .. ....,.......

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