EnderGolem997
webnovel took down my previous review just posting it back I read up to chapter 17 it's not bad at the start I was confused but just went with it and I must say this is good I like how the author doesn't just copy and paste and makes his own original story so keep up the good work but I'm wondering if this is g*y the relationship between the mc and George is very weird but wholesome
Your story is good, at first, it was kind of confusing since you change POV too often. Especially at the first chapter where mc was just introduced and you just ridiculously change the POV to another character without another introduction which put most people off, possibly rage quit and stop reading the story further. Changing POV frequently, make the story doesn't connect and made people who read feel confused. Unlike the original where the author could control POV change and it didn't change POV frequently unless necessary to develop another character in the novel. There's nothing else I want to complain about besides this and yeah I like the fanfiction and hope you don't stop writing it.
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This is a very well crafted story; I haven't read much of it yet, but I can tell that this twist on the original Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint has a lot of potential. One note: Remember to keep phrases flowing in the same direction; some sentences are missing words like 'had' and such, prompting readers to take time filling in that word in their minds. This made no sense- I think this story is awesome!!(♡°▽°♡) Read it!!(;⌣̀_⌣́)