i hope author keep updateing is good story so far.

no update?

Add wife / region

Well, you got me hag here, keep up the work! I hope you are well and inspire to continue to write the story!

Here, she's hot.

She was from nfs mw, maybe you could get a black list join the verse hahaha

Mc x Mia Townsend

Toyota Supra Mr2 or Dodge Viper...

Sefirah

cassandra from new hharry otter game were hot

why not use gun as a transmiter? his power could reach far away if the bullet hit lol

for harem's sake, they have both known each other since they were young and you the author writing them like they will become saverus wives as he was so close to them. So I wish the story could be harem but only for the three of them as it will be natural and not force.

this is not pure naruto story, there sre some mix in it which I didn't like as it will created a strong mc since beginning without effort and as the story continued the situation became more bland until the author himself bored to write the fanfic and then being dropped.

the mc character not consistent, the change in story is too absurd, it hard to understand what the author want to convey.

Also, I had this thought even if he is a celestial dragon and he hates being one of them. it couldn't be separate since he is also one of them, even if in the future when he was at war and sides with luffy, he shouldn't forget his origin, he is a celestial dragon, he could correct their mistaken and rule the world with the spirit of noblesse oblige!

right? I find it interesting too! well, you could craft your story based on these concepts and see how it goes!

Those devil fruit with water type power will be useless against the strongest people like yonko and their crew as they must be not afraid or already cover their weakness from devil fruit so my point is he should choose death fruit, maybe or maybe you should create a story based on love and death as Hancock eat love fruit, I find it has chemistry if he eats death fruit as death and love sometimes has many connections, you could start from here.

Well, there are too many unnecessary twists and turn which I hate. If h I knew one piece, he must know how Hancock look like when she was imprisoned like a slave and as a child, he saves this too much torture to my liking.

at this point, I no longer have the interest to continue reading, because everything is doomed to be a plain story with a system and godlike reincarnation troupe.

I'm usually using my phone to correct the text with grammary. Because if you use it on an online website or built-in apps on ms. words it gets problematic.