Review Detail of TANGHULU in An Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint

This is a very well crafted story; I haven't read much of it yet, but I can tell that this twist on the original Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint has a lot of potential. One note: Remember to keep phrases flowing in the same direction; some sentences are missing words like 'had' and such, prompting readers to take time filling in that word in their minds. This made no sense- I think this story is awesome!!(♡°▽°♡) Read it!!(；⌣̀_⌣́)