Review Detail of L1H3NZ in An Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint

Your story is good, at first, it was kind of confusing since you change POV too often. Especially at the first chapter where mc was just introduced and you just ridiculously change the POV to another character without another introduction which put most people off, possibly rage quit and stop reading the story further. Changing POV frequently, make the story doesn't connect and made people who read feel confused. Unlike the original where the author could control POV change and it didn't change POV frequently unless necessary to develop another character in the novel. There's nothing else I want to complain about besides this and yeah I like the fanfiction and hope you don't stop writing it.