MoeJam90
Found your book recently, and was instantly hooked. Can't wait for more chapters. Writing Quality: Great writing. No obvious grammatical errors. Good sentence. Story Development: Very interesting plots. Has multiple plots for different characters going on. Curious on how these plots will interact. Character Design: MC isn't flawless, feels human. MC can grow as a character, and isn't that over powered. Side characters also feel real. They have history, problems/issues to work through. Updating Stability: Decent chapter rate. Consistent and author will say if something delays an update. World Background: Great worldbuilding.
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For a character that have transmigrated so many times, the mc sure doesn't act like it. The mc acts like a child afraid and unsure of everything. With so much experience, I would expect that he'll mostly be apathetic and at least be able to lie proficiently. The character is disappointing. More than 364 transmigrations and he's still sweating while lieing and people can still play him anyhow. Truly disappointing
Author here! Hi Guys, I hope you enjoy the adventure of these unlikely heroes! This is my first Isekai/ Reincarnation Novel. So, pardon me if you find the writing crude. I am doing my best to improve my art and writing style. I hope you support this novel and don't be shy to comment, do a review or vote! Thanks for reading this!
This review is written after reading the latest chap at this moment. (Chapter 7) I'm not the type of person who casually gives a half-hearted review to please others and I'm brutally honest about it... Perhaps... Anyway, the writing quality is quite good and there were no major mistakes that could take one away from their reading immersion aside from a few tense shifts. But the latter can be worked on through editing. 5 for story development. There were no forced interactions and everything seemed logical so far. Just that, the gods felt so weak in my opinion. Characters aren't fleshed out yet and this might be because of the lack of chapters. This includes the MC himself. <- This opinion may change depending on how the author approaches this point. Update Stability 5 Aside from the characters, the setting wasn't properly explained yet. Again, this might be because of the lack of chapters. But the good thing is that I can see development in this area. All in all, this book has the potential to reach top 100 for originals (based on my experience). Only of course, if the book manages to get its well-deserved attention.
I am at Chapter 85 ... I just want the author to know that their are certain Chapters which is not at all needed or the contents of the chapters could have been shorted. Certain chapters is entirely composed of a single conversation between two entities ,eg the Campfire chapter or the four long chapters where the goddess shows the MC about his past , which definitely could have been shorted . Author most of us uses our passes to open the chapters , cause it's not free , And those chapters has to be worthwhile ... of course you can definitely give vivid discriptions and details and I absolutely love it ... But it's not like Chyralisis where chapters are free of Cost ... You are selling the book dear author... Gotta keep that in mind .. To everyone .. This is a good book with good English and the details of characters and world background is given vividly ... But this story is verrrrrrrrry slow paced ... Sometimes you will lose your cool as I did ... sometimes you will feel that more the Chapter is good but not worth your buck ... One can give it a shot ... And for the author.. If you want your Novel to be of High ranked , to get popular, to be acclaimed by your audience and get good pay for your work ... Please see the Chapters is worth the bang .. Once again it's a good novel .. just certain chapter messes up the Vive ..
Plus Points: Writing quality is the main plus point to this great world background. Update stability is good and character design is also up to the mark. Drawbacks: To me, I do read slow-paced stories and enjoy them if they intrigue me. This story is Slow-paced but the problem is that it feels like it never took off, it's still there exactly how it started after nearly 40 chapters. They is no sign of the system promised in the tags, MC is reincarnated so many times but seems so underwhelming, I mean... I get that he lost his abilities but still I did not find that aura or charm of a guy who lived 364 times. I liked the slow pace at the start but as the chapters went by, it got boring and I felt like abandoning the book. There are no interesting scenarios to read further. I hope the author correct this.
I got to the latest free chap and this story is not about kingdom building. Its more like a dark DND story filled with intrigue and drama. I feel like with the current pacing it might take 300+ chaps for the kingdom bldg to start. I like the writing style its detailed but on the down side the pacing suffers heavily. I may have not remembered but there were no details regarding government, economy, military, trading or etc.The details were mostly about their thoughts, situations, movements and expressions. i heavily suggest the author should read release the witch, its currently my favorite book in webnovel and most likely the best kingdom building novel in this site.
20 ch in and no kingdom building has occurred. High quality writing but a misleading title. If you want a story with intrigue and a dark setting, then this is for you. If you want the challenges of governance, setting up a kingdom, leading armies, etc. I have no clue when it will start given the stories pacing.
To everyone who is starting this novel, ignore the criticisms from people about the novel early on. They think they have a point, but this novel takes more than 10-15 chapters to explain every single detail of why things happen. Trust me in that when you start reading more into it, it is much better than the average Webnovel story.
Leaving a review because why not? π€© This is my first book about kingdom building that I have read and I have to be honestβI am amazed as an author as well as to how different and at the same time different it is to write these kinds of stories! It must have been difficult! Anyway... Writing quality: I like how the author wrote the story! You could find less grammar mistakes and I like the creativity put on this when it comes to his writing in his action scenes. It is one thingβto be honestβthat I am envious of because action scenes are difficult for me! For the update stability, it is already a given. π I could see how continuous the efforts of the author to be able to update without stopping! π€© Great jobβdespite the busy schedule! Adulting hits hard! πͺ For the story development, from the chapters of 90+, I could say that the author has been planning well of the plot. From the number of chapters as of the moment, you could deduce from the pacing that it is just rightβnot too fast and not too slow, giving the readers ample time to read and at the same time enjoy what the author has to offer. π I could see surprises are going to be in released in the future! Character designβto be honest, I would have to read more to get a better say of this. But as I could see from the comments of the readers, they are torn between cursing the ML or either glorifying him. For me, I have yet to read more chapters to have a say in this so I would have to comment back on my review to have a better say on this aspect. π Finally, world background. World background for this kind of story is something difficult in my opinion because you would have to think outside the box. To be honest, I could not pull it off! π€ However, for the author to weave this creative world is something unique to his storyβwhich is very amusing on his part! Well done! π€© Keep up the good work, MoeJam90! π₯³ Wishing to learn more from you when it comes to writing action scenes! πͺ