AlienWarlord
in comparison to the Harry potter crossover it's not good. 1 not clear if they truly merged or not 2 may as well have had it that it's another orphan to create more conflict etc 3 MC got an elf way to fast makes things to easy 4 understandable why you would have MC check heratige but to me it's weak writing 5 not clear when set 6 could have made Tom riddle/ Voldemort a member of hydra or something
I'll ignore the obvious OP wand, uber easy to get house elves, ultra SS rare bloodlines and friendly goblins. Waking up at 3am? I think that's just dumb or simply wrong. I got bored of the focus on boring ass druella and the whole 'save the houses' Just met this girl on the train, skip scene and now she's the new BFF for no good reason. 'I just met this dude so now I'll deal with bulling and blood purist in general 'cause? I talked to him for a bit? ' Dumb. Also tom: I got a shitload of thing to do but I better spend my first day in school waking up at 3am to train this unimportant girl. TLDR> way too many cliches, OP MC turns into an idiot whenever he's around kids
Man i always hoped there was a novel about someone with HP magic in marvel because HP magic is really underestimated. Man i always hoped there was a novel about someone with HP magic in marvel because HP magic is really underestimated. Man i always hoped there was a novel about someone with HP magic in marvel because HP magic is really underestimated.
i wanna ask if Tom is going to help his girlfriend in learning all the things he worked hard just because she is stuck with him. for i think that romance and spoiling are two different things. it will be utterly stupid to give all the things you worked hard for to be given just because you love that person. I mean you can just protect them from dark or just don't introduce her to that world if you don't want to cause her problems. it's is utterly stupid that a girl can have such strong power by just having *** with the said guy while he has to do the hard work in search of the things to increase his strength.
While in the beginning there was a LOT of nerfing, he got the OPness he deserves in later chapters. But then he freaking ENSLAVED ARTHUR PENDRAGON! like What The Fuck? He could have just found someone that is EVIL and not someone like ARTHUR PENDRAGON there are a lot of evil motherfvckers in the world but he decided to freaking ENSLAVE ARTHUR FUCKING PENDRAGON! The only reason this review even have 3 stars is because it IS good, the Author really just don't know what to freaking do.
Pretty good fanfic. came to the Chapter God Avatar, Lady Death, the absurd All-Black Sword, which gave him the power to even kill Celestials and even Thanos with just the sneezes of Lady death. he spent a lot of time studying Science and bracing himself with a super warrior serum to fight Thanos in the future but in fact he had the support of the Cosmic Beings in just a few chapters and destroyed the already pretty good storyline. The potential for the Shadow Dimension Lord's Knull to become the motivation that made MC strong was lost with only 2 chapters. Get the support of Lady Death and All-Black Swords only MC is one of the creatures with potential threats under THE ONE ABOVE ALL and the Living Tribiunal maybe. Overall the progress of the 100+ development chapters of the MC was destroyed only because of the ignorance of the breeders wanting to make Lady death on the MC side and make slaves. 😂😂😂 # ADVICE FOR AUTHOR: MORE RESEARCH BEFORE CREATING A SENSIBLE STORYLINE.
I like the plot but the writing quality meh(the words that the author uses are nice though). Author mostly uses present tense instead of past tense which makes it a bit uncomfortable to read and the character's appearances aren't described well(I don't know what the characters look like). The story is a bit rushed in the beginning and a lot of things aren't explained clearly. The background also isn't explained much so I don't know how or when he gets to places. (I don't know if he's running or walking he's just there somehow) The whole story is a bit vague(?) to me because I can't really focus on what's going on.