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The info dumps is getting irritating. I mean, I can summarize what he said to "Darkseid ks super strong and DC isn't consistent". That's really my only problem with the whole story eh, you have great grammar, long chapters (even tho half of it is info dump), and some pretty good storyline. It's really just the info dumps that's really messing with it all.
Yeah some of the covos with all of them felt forced, but it's a really small part of the chapter so idrc. There is a problem that you have tho your POV changes are confusing, for example, there was a paragraph near the end where Odin was talking. But with no cuts/space it suddenly switched to Ichigo, so I got confused because I just read that Odin is thinking of introducing himself to Rossweisse. Only when I read the next 2 paragraph did it clear it up. Other than that tho, great chapterđ