TheLustGod
I got informed my last review got hidden or some shit(without being deleted) so I'll try it again. "I just can't force myself to read this anymore. At first, I was fine with it and normally it doesn't bother me, but the two sisters are just an issue I can't bring myself to get over. I don't care that they aren't virgins, rather that they went into heat and did such things, which means they tried to mate aka make kids with some random men, I managed to get over that, but then I found out that the wolf girl who is the same age is a virgin, so the excuse for the girl's actions just became invalidated and I can only see them as sluts, if the goblin dicks weren't described I'd have doubts about whether they slept with goblins behind the MCs back. I tried to force myself these past so many days, but I just can't anymore."
Sup, i promised to write a review to your novel as soon as i am up to date. I decided to give you some pointers on what I think you are good and Bad at so you may increase the general quality of your novel. Take it with a grain of salt, since I am no expert myself and these are just some of my obversations. And also let my say I enjoyed your Novel so far and I wouldn't bother to write this review if i didn't. Good: - The writing quality is mostly good. Here and there I rarely see some wrong pronouns, but thats it. - The Story is interesting so far, but i can't really say much more to it since we are still at the beginning. I like the heroes' journey model and if you keep it that way i will continue to like it. - The Worldbuilding is also interesting. There isn't much to it yet, since we gradually progress with our understanding of the world with the understanding the MC has. But there are lot of uncertainties with potential. - Man of culture Bad: - The Wifes lack individuality. It's cool that there is art and also the different races and such, but I know more about the personalities of some sidecharacters then i know about the wifes. - Hardships that the character has to overcome is often essential to make it interesting. Your story is a little bit fast pasted and you are missing some opportunities to make it more interesting and give the characters more depth because of that.
I hope more people should read this novel. In my opinion this is a good story. Worth the time reading this book. The story is a little bit of fast phase but simple and straightforward. You can easily pass your time reading this book. Author please be patience, this book will eventually get its popularity. Just wait for more readers to read. Just release the characters in a regular interval.
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La trama general va bien, buenos prospectos para la historia, aunque al inicio empezΓ³ un poco cojo con algunas partes confusas en la trama y escenario aunque el autor lo menciona despuΓ©s no estΓ‘ de mΓ‘s si luego quiere editar los primeros capΓtulos, me gustarΓa que las mujeres del harem tengan un valor real como sugerencia y ejje un poco mΓ‘s detalle en la escenas :v, pero buena historia sigue con los caps ππ»
this book has potential, the direction it goes us good, progression speed is good too, really good grammar, but character development is not shown much, the info about the world and its power system isn't really clear, and i personally don't like how he goes for one night stands, it just doesn't feel right
Good story with nice lemon scenes. No terrible things to break immersion or any significant bad stuff. Give it a try. The only cons I perceived are: the system with abilities that seems to be forgotten. The ' partners' that seems to dissappear or never mentioned. The time skips that rushed the pacing. The fights when they mentioned experience or gains no longer appeared. It also needs a lil bit of proofreading. Nevertheless, the pros outweigh anything and you can not deny the effort the author made (planning, discord with images, reader interactions, etc.) So author :