Evil_Dragon
A shameless review from the author here. Just here to tell you that the novel is gonna be pretty long. It's gonna be a harem but not from the start. MC gonna be smart, manipulative, maybe evil in some regards. I have tried to keep the relationships as normal as possible. Hopefully, you ignore a few things here and there. I will try to keep the grammar decent...
Well...at first I thought it's gonna be a different kind of ATG fanfic but I was wrong. The same old story, our MC arrives in Floaty floaty city, wisely chooses to rob protagonist of everything he got. Cliche. Author is trying very hard to show mc very smart but just from the beginning plot holes start to suck up to mc.
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Look as a FF writer u deserve 5 stars cause of ur writing but ur stories...I will not lie, I've enjoyed each one [ the DD, AGT and naruto FF's] before I dropped cause.. -ur stories all have MC do **** cause of plot...whether its getting chicks or becoming stronger. And its bland as fk -And offense but ur romance is forced,,,the DD FF, that was messed up and rushed [ in relationships]. There was no moments of romance, nothing built and ur MC was more or less the 3rd wheel in that FF, most of the story that dude just being with the main cast....no world exploration, nothing [atleast till where I read C43]...u should explore and add ****. -Ur AGT FF...that MC is the generic AGT FF MC...meaning,,,MC is a show off retard, gets chick cause he is good looking and gains their interest, they barely have a personality...and its all forced by plot...MC has knowledge about everything, but he barely does **** and whatever he does, theres no consequences. Why? He MC. The amount times he should've been killed cause of what he did in the AGT ff is practically limitless. but nope, he protected by plot. and he more or less follows what the OG yun che did and despite what he does there are not many changes -Ur OG bk, MC was a rapist -Naruto FF...MC is protected by plot and kinda weak [ironic cause others bk MC was OP and yet they didnt do ****],,,and somethings like *cough* *tsunade* seemed forced... --------------------- Look i am not bashing u, or saying u ****...cause u not..people like ur ****, I did to BUT there are some ****ty things in ur bk. So...I , long time reader and some what of a fan, request u to avoid doing what u've done.. Dont make MC a show off retard, use brains and do ****. Think, plan, u say manipulative MC, but more often MC just barely tricks a chick, he moreless just lies to em...dont do this...make MC plan, be smart, think and dont show off, hide power....add new ****, rather than following cannon. and the love interests..dont make em useless fk toys like in AGT FF....give em a better personality [but not the cliche arrogant young miss that falls for strong MC in 2 chps]...take **** slow, and make MC use his brains. And dont force romance, take it slow. anyway, my rant is over. GL
This is basically a speed run of the original ATG except the MC is far more unlikeable. The author wants to make a ruthless and smart MC but ends up making everyone else an idiot and MC a spiteful manchild. The worst thing is that the author twists the personalities of the OCs and forces the same plot as the original.
the story has a high potential if the author just played it right. but things just came crashing down starting on the part where he contradicted himself about about not wanting to sully xisu's body. I don't know what the author decided the mc personality to be. but to me the mc is like a 13 year old boy ongoing a rebellious phase except he was given power and being fed with godlyspoon and thinks that he is the most miserable person in existence and being hypocritical yet wanted everything.... respond if you think I am wrong. I am open for discussion, just make sure you get your point clear.
This novel is very well written and shows that the author is experienced in writing, the novel is refined, the plot is well thought of and characters are well written. I generally nit-pick a lot about fan-fics like this but this novel was sooo good that i had to take a pause from reading and come here to rate this novel. This is by far the best ATG novel i have read and that's saying a lot given the amount of ATG fan-fics on this site. Author you have created a wonderfull story just don't drop it, it would be a pity for such good ATG fan-fic to be left unfinished.
Hi author I really like your story. And I want to both suggest and ask to translate your story there were no problems with copyright in the future. Since I want to translate your story into Russian and in order not to cause conflicts with you in the future, I ask your permission. And Yes your story is read in the CIS.And Yes, your story is read in the CIS. Please give permission and discuss any conditions!
kind of lame. Mc refused to have romantic feeling at first because he didn't want to dirty on the Previous owner of the body but he forgot that he already used evil technique which previous user hated. Also he is kind of naive , edgelord type. Chu yuechan humiliated him at first and he simply left her. Although he intended to get revenge later at least he could have taken some benefits .
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