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darkimortal
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I got to chapter sixty-two then I finally said I had enough. The story for the most part was doing okay, but a few things bothered me to the point I was like no, just no. First off the body the MC is using already comprehended a lot of skills to a high level. ( the MC got Xisu's body and soul ) So to me it makes no sense that he has to recomprehend skills already learned by the soul and body ( and not have the skills comprehended himself to around the same degree even if he can't really use the energy extensive skills ) and not be completely OP to anyone under the sovereign realm just on principle. Second What's up with this heart devil or whatever it is? Truthfully it just seems you made up some BS so the MC doesn't completely destroy canon by banging the princess. ( And what's with this R@apey vibe going on ) Third the way you portrayed Fairy Chu was done poorly if this story is not an AU. To me I think she would have been more cautious then this jump the gun behavior you have going on. I mean what she did was retarted, "Oh no! He denied me I can't think of anything to persuade him to help me more than he did let's enslave him to help instead of using that month of time I will be watching over him while he trains", I mean she just jumped right into a wall for no reason. She didn't even think about his background or anything like some nobody could cure her and act arrogantly to her. The benefits shouldn't have blinded her this much, it just seems like you want to make a problem with her for no reason. ( Did you dislike her in the original or something? )

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Dark Rebirth (An ATG Fanfic)

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DAT_NOVEL_BOI
DAT_NOVEL_BOILv5DAT_NOVEL_BOI

The Author is a bad writer what do you expect Er Gen level s of writing?

GokuSayan
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What is your favorite Er Gen novel?

DAT_NOVEL_BOI:The Author is a bad writer what do you expect Er Gen level s of writing?
DAT_NOVEL_BOI
DAT_NOVEL_BOILv5DAT_NOVEL_BOI

A Will Eternal cuz of it's comedy but I think he made another story like it but in the modern era and it's bad.

GokuSayan:What is your favorite Er Gen novel?
ParagonDaoOfBS
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I liked I Shall Seal the Heavens, that was really good

DAT_NOVEL_BOI:The Author is a bad writer what do you expect Er Gen level s of writing?