Alexander_the_grey
I like this. I really do. This is actually the first time I found a fanfiction on webnovel, no matter what fandom or genre, that is actually very good. Color me impressed. I sincerely hope this story will be continued for a long time, hopefully even beyond the storyline of the seventh book. Maybe explore some more of the unknown wizarding world. Magic in different countries, ancient relics and ruins, myths, and all that. For now, I defenitely recommend this book to anyone who likes the wizarding world. Keep up the good work. 👍
Starts out good but gets very passive and lame as story progress. MC personality is very beta and very passive. Hes a goodie two shoe complex. what bugs me is is attitude towards the death eaters, the Dursley and Ron the Weasel. Death Eaters : MC is OP enough to kill them but adopts an attitude of wait for the fight that the bad guy will bring instead of hunting them and killing them one by one. Instead he tries to train others to fight the death eater while stating how much he hates them and blaly bla bla.... The Dursley: MC supposedly has a passive attitude/mentality that says gives bad people a second chance (school bullies, ***** wizards -death eaters) but when he shows up to the Dursley he loses it and and acts like a tyrant. This scene makes me feel like MC is bias or is prejudice towards muggles cause he doesnt even give them the friendly warning like how he does with withches/wizards. Even though author wrote him going off his rock was because of his magical animal side take over - Still does not excuse!! Ron the Weasel : We all know Ron is a twat! Author tries to make excuse that he wants to give Ron the second chance and benefit of the doubts. In authors novel he straight up makes Ron a twat. Ron goes off shooting his mouth and does offensive/retarted thing but MC just brush it off saying "oh he is still young and still teachable to change". While this happens over and over. Author is basically a Ron lover and give him free pass just cause he is Harrys side kick. Over all 3 stars, could be better. Perfer the other Alexander harry potter novel. this one is too passive with Beta complex.
English is not my main language, I was expecting to read it but I was very disappointed with the story, and basically the beginning of a fan-fic that did not go forward, I expected more from history as a person to die and the reward and reincarnation and soon so I lose my family out of nowhere and suffer for months. it was better to stay dead, worse of all he accepts it in a good way and doesn't complain and totally illogical since he lost his family in the first life and soon lost it in the second it was better to have put him as an orphan that the story could have been better, and another serious but interesting thing to have put him in a family because why put him in a family of pure blood he invents without a good story, you cannot accept it, because the end is already in his face he will spend the 7 years being a helper from Harry because dumbledore will say that his parents were of the order of the phoenix and he would like him to be of the order too then he will spend the whole fan-fic helping everyone with his very bad powers, sorry thing and what i think when i read the first 6 chapters
Good writing, with an average understanding of the canon, too little interactions with characters from Rowling, and way too much interaction with OC, it's well written but not my thing, from one side you had the horrors of the death eaters and from the other, the naivety of a child story, the idealistic points of view and hero complex of the MC are a bit over the top for my liking but that's only my point of view I stick around until chapter 67 and couldn't go further. I gave you 5 in writing quality even when taking into account some misspells because you deserve it, but 2 in story development and character design, as I said too much contrast between a gritty reality of the horrors of the death eaters and the "fluff" you presented, anyway keep going in your projects, although it wasn't for me, I see why many people liked it. I wish you success in your future endeavors.
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I like your story, many characters gain power but at what cost? Their effort, there are many possibilities but they never understand that many things have consequences, that is why my favorite chapter is the second, their determination is quite good and revenge does not consume it, in my place I would try a dismemberment of all. They, even though he travels to a world he is aware of, does not make everything fun and laughter while humiliating his enemies, showing us the sad truth of society regardless of the world.