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I'm speechless. I don't think I can do justice to your work by reviewing it but I'll give it a try. You can get published. You're that good. I would buy your book and love to have it!!! Easy English? ✔️ Original Content? ✔️ Mystery? ✔️ Romance? ✔️ Your novel holds the attention of the readers from the start. I love it so much. I'll surely read everytime you update. It's added to my library. I'll even vote from time to time. All the best!
Cool concept! Using phones for magic is something I haven't seen before! Keep it up! There's some grammatical and pacing issues throughout the portion of the story that I read though. There were some issues with tenses in the prologue. And the fact that you switch between first and third person does not flow very well, even if you add the separators between when you switch them up. Overall, just keep experimenting and developing this concept. Your writing will grow as you grow and it will grow faster as you write. Keep it up! I'm excited to see what you can do in the future!
Well done! The story is written clearly and with a lot of descriptions and detailed writing, making it an immersive experience. The plot of the story is very interesting and the prologue help as a suspense builder, making me want to read more of the story. The concept is great, the characters are dynamic, and the grammar is good. It is a great read, Well done!